A Simple Vision

one of my favorites

A simple vision of a starless night

Brought about by a soft carress

The graceful passing of a cool breeze

Stirring the fallen leaves from thier slumber

Setting them to dance in its wake

A brittle rustle among the cold stones

The sightless eyes of angels gazing down upon me

Crosses of stone slowly crumbling under the glare of the pale moon

The scent of jasmine and roses entwined with sweetness of earth

The dulcet tones of a bell ring out across the night

Darkness begins to fade

Burned away by the coming mornings light

My simple vision slips away

As do I

Until my vision returns

Reviews

[Damien Dsoul]

Evidently, you have quite an imagination within yourself, James. Interesting to note how well you put it to good use, such as the style you often indulge in: mixing dark with surrealism, as you protrayed so eloquently in this poem. It also carries evacative splendour of the senses. Except for that tiny error in the fourth line (their - thier), you work really achieves its greatness.

[Chelsea Schermerhorn]

I like this piece- the epitome of a nature poem. I like the imagery and the "vision" provided. This makes out to be a very strong competitor in the contest. Thank you for your entry into the Any and All Poetry Contest. You have again made it into the first cut of finalists.

[syn]

I felt the emotions wash over me as I read. Very nice

[Marie]

Nicely written.

[Sara Searchefield (The ..]

What are we to do without our vision? Even with such a simple vision?
We will be disconnected from the world and that's why we need vision as as these...

Sara Seay

[Kenji Light]

Very interesting write. I wrote something similar to this. The poem is called The Esplanade. It is about the night fading into day. It seems very simple and yet there are precious things that can too often be overlooked if not seen from the correct lens or perspective. Very good write.

[Cathiesblog]

This poem is amazing..beautiful..capturing it all!!...

[Crystal]

I love the way there is the double meaning to the poem.

[Celtic Cat]

Very floaty ~ I enjoyed drifting through this. It is beautiful.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Fabulous and wonderfully written poem. I really like it, great job!!!

Heather

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Your poem are as wonderful and descriptive as your stories. A wonder write here....nicely done!