Discrete...

Discrete...

A Poem by Jamestown
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Feeling down...

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Discrete...

When my eyes leak and my heart skips a beat
I try so hard to be discrete even when the pain peaks,

I feel down but never out
I get energized by this pain and instead of pout I want
to scream and shout,

But I stay discrete because I don't want to repeat the
mistakes I've made in the past the same mistakes that
bit me in the a*s,

I try to learn from my past mistakes
and not make them again so I just pretend everything is
okay because eventually tomorrow will be a new day,

One day that pain will hide itself just like I hide my frustration
so I just stay patient knowing that the smile will return and I won't
want to hide like the sun behind a cloud my frown will be turned upside
down,

So for now I will stay discrete
I will let the pain peak
I will let my eyes leak
I will be okay cause tomorrow is a new day...

© 2015 Jamestown



Author's Note

Jamestown
Not everyday is a good day, but God is always good!!!

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Nice piece..being discrete about how u feel with some form of pain aint easy..enjoyed readin it

Posted 1 Year Ago


Pain is one of the best teachers of life that brings many lessons. I love how hopeful the poem is. This pain too shall pass. Brilliant!!!

"So for now I will stay discrete
I will let the pain peak
I will let my eyes leak
I will be okay cause tomorrow is a new day..."

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jamestown

1 Year Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Im glad you have so much faith in god its a good thing :).
Im sorry you are struggling and having a tough time in life james that truly sucks.
I love your rhyme scheme in this when you do rhyme its flawless. Althpugh i feel little bits and pieces in this poem didnt rhyme but most of it did.
I think it would be better if the whole poem rhymed or don't rhynr at all. Either way is better then some parts rhyming and some not.
Just my opinion.
Over all im a huge fan of your work.
Great write :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jamestown

1 Year Ago

Great feedback:)
Thanks again and b-blessed!
cimmy wuv xxxooo

1 Year Ago

Your welcome :)
" I hide my frustration
so I just stay patient knowing that the smile will return and I won't
want to hide like the sun behind a cloud "

You have a powerful spirit full of energy and hopefulness. We can always take small steps to change things here and there and change our attitudes on life as a whole. A strong write...:)..............

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jamestown

1 Year Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are most welcome...:)................
that's the spirit, my friend! thank you for the uplifting message. indeed, tomorrow is another day.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jamestown

1 Year Ago

Thanks for checking it out, I've been going through tough times so I needed to remind myself as
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There is a very sane and relevant message in this poem. Tough moments dont last forever and tomorrow is bound to be beautiful.
Nicely expressed

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jamestown

1 Year Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Crying quietly, it's the hardest and easiest thing to do at the same time.

Pen on.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jamestown

1 Year Ago

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!
Tears come and tears go, just as smiles come and go. We have to learn to take the bitter with the sweet. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


Its those days that really our strength comes to life
we are human
we let out all the pain
and come out way better

its life
and its beautiful for all its dark and light

i miss your words james

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thank you for writing this beautiful poem... it rhymes with constant flow. I felt like it carried me through the pain. This is exactly how I have been feeling. I want to be loud about how I feel inside, but I am choosing to be discrete. Probably because I'm trying to be strong, so that no one can see my vulnerable side. Is that how you felt when you wrote it?

Posted 1 Year Ago



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