To the Butterflies

July 22 felt a bit like a cage.

Butterfly, fly and be free

Butterfly, dream and be free

Butterfly, sing and be free

Butterfly, love and be free

Butterfly, open you wings

to show you tiny simplicity

and fill the earth with beauty

Like the whimpers of violins,

unfold the most hidden secrets

which your graceful wings keep

Like the sigh of a piano,

expose the most treasured desires,

which your lovely dance distracts

Butterfly, just live and make yourself free.

Reviews

[annabellee]

I really like your poem, I also like butterflys quite a lot. I especially loved the first stanza and how you compared them to instruments. That's such a creative and nice idea :)
Well penned :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like how you used sounds to describe how a butterfly flutters by ^^ violins and pianos can be so peaceful sounding when played right and that's what a butterfly is, light and graceful.

Good Job

[Jazmin-Ruby]

Thank you, Peace Keeper! How you analyzed it was exactly what I had in mind when I wrote this.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

^^ you're welcome. me loves violins lol

[Jazmin-Ruby]

Tell me about it. I wish I could play a violin.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

D: me too I wanna try learning but you have to have one first xD

[Jazmin-Ruby]

Haha. True. Do you play any instruments? :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I played or tried to play drums in high school...lol the violin interests me more though. You?

[Jazmin-Ruby]

I attempted the drums in high school too. Didn't go so well, lol. I play the guitar and the piano, but I admit that a violin seems more interesting now.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

xD well you tried more than I did lol