'Till Death do us part

'Till Death do us part

A Poem by PurpleHeadedCrazyNut
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A girl's Boyfriend dies; her boyfriend that she is DEEPLY in love with.. It's about her feelings of loneliness when he dies, and about how much he means to her.

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It's been such a long time since I saw you. 
An eternity of nothingness;
You were my everything, 
Until everything faded to dust. 
My Soul, My Spirit..
They left when you did..
But I can still here them;
They keep on screaming... 
And I need you to ease the pain 
To heal the wounds to my broken heart. 
But you can't hear them can you?
You're so far away. 
I need you;
I love you;
The tears won't stop falling
And I need you to wipe them away. 
To kiss me,  and tell me it's going to be okay;
The Angels won't allow you to hold me in your arms again, 
Unless I too, become nothing but a distant memory, 
With a Bullet, a Knife, a Rope;
I will be with you 
But then what? What do I leave behind?
A wooden box with a lifeless mask?
A beautiful angel, crying for her lifeless child, 
But none of it matters,
I want to be with you again. 
Even if I cannot feel your breath on my neck, 
The beating of your heart, as you take my soul to dance, 
So Sweetheart, I'm on my way. 
I won't be long.
I love you


© 2010 PurpleHeadedCrazyNut



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PurpleHeadedCrazyNut
Could you please comment on the pros and cons of this piece? Thankyou xx <3

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I love this... it made me think of Zak though. It's beautifully written Jess, well done (: WRITE MORE. k? :3

Posted 7 Years Ago


Awesome! I love the "With a bullet, a knife, a rope" line because it shows just how hard she's thinking of suicide. Though my fave line is "A wooden box with a lifeless mask." It really stuck out to me because of the way it makes you feel. I know that it means her coffin, but it's such a great way of putting it. Great job, love it!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Woah. That was fantastic!!!! I can't find a con. Your words were flowing and beautiful. The only thing is just my personal thing against suicides, which I am pretty sure is what's about to happen here. But it was great, it was real, and it was fabulous. "The beating of my heart, as you take my soul to dance," WOW! Brilliant. I cannot believe that you are 13. That was amazing!

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on July 29, 2010
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Tags: Depression, death, love, heartache, heartbroken, heartbreak, soul, spirit, suicide, girlfriend, boyfriend, lover, soul mate, sad, miss, darling, sweetheart

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PurpleHeadedCrazyNut
PurpleHeadedCrazyNut

Blackburn, United Kingdom



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Hi there. I'm Jess ^^ I'm 13 years old. .. more..

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