Floating in the Brizzillag

A collaboration with Karl Stewart.

Flutterbies and Scallywags
floating in a brizzillag.
Mumbliwags and prissywicks
swimming in a zig zag

All together, stroke, stroke,
the mumbliwags are swimming.
Dipping here and dipping there.
the flutterbies are skimming.

But not so much, those scallywags,
a lazy bunch they are...
and what about those prissywicks,
the laziest by far.

Bumblies are bumbling,
What very funny things.
Listing side to side are they
On their whimsy wings   

Prissywicks and Frakkyliks
tiring long before,
any of their counterparts
on the brizzillag shore

Flitting hither and thither, and way beyond yonder,
the flutterbies flitter all day.
It's a shame, don't you know, when it comes to playing,
only the flutterbies come out to put on a show. 

The rest are all lazy, and mindless or crazy 
and float around in the brizzillag.
If it were a contest, you know who would be the best,  
And Flutterbies would be winnin',  every blue ribbon.

Author's Note

12.27.10 A collaboration with a wonderful word warrior, Karl Stewart. :) Was great fun working with you! :)

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Such a joyous, dancing collab that sings with every color... Beautifully done in every way!

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice to read, beautiful creation............

[Jaweena...Eileen Quinta..]

Hahahaha...now that made me laugh!! I love it...just found the cure for depression.
Great play with words and so imaginative and FUN! Thank you for putting me in a great mood.

[Muse]

Just reading this aloud is fun! I love your humor and clever use of words.

[Larry Dyson]

hehe ..cute..now say that 30 times ...really fast!

[KAREN]

Awesome write! Fun to read!!

[Richielee]

hehehe..good girl ,ten out of ten! loved it :)

[crazysox]

It's great! Reminds me of jabberwocky, without all of the monster-slaying. I could definitely picture the mumbliwags and flutterbies. Even without a description, we know what you're describing. Keep up the creativity!

[emmajoy]

Made me laugh virtually start to finish. Your poetry always leaves me happier than I felt a few minutes before .. thank you so much for that! Your words remind me of Alice, somewhat surreal or magical ..

[FJ Davis]

A "collaboration" sounds as if one or both of you conspired with the enemy. It appears to be, however, a successful conspiracy.
This piece is a creative fantasy that devilishly twists the tongue and thoroughly befuddles the brain--much like reading "The New York Times." Unlike The Times, however, "Floating..." is a true pleasure to experience.
Congratulations on expertly constructing a quality poetic product.