Butterfly

~ written in Octelle form ~

art ~ Andrew Atroshenko

 

 

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Poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly

floating through a sky of blue

to dance ‘pon a cloud or two

sunbeams weave a light within

so shadows can’t find her when

poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly

~~~

Author's Note

The Octelle is a form created by Emily Romano. It has eight lines and the rhyme scheme is aabbccaa, the syllable count is 88777788. The first two lines are repeated as the last two lines. What further sets the form, in its description, is using personification and symbolism in a telling manner.

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly
sweet write. You are extremely good in these colourful depictions :)
Love :)
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[MsJewel]

Thank you Anand! :) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

pleasure is mine. I'm a fan :)

[redzone]

Ballet as dance and art form is often as structured as the Octelle form in poetry and both in the hands of creative and artistic mind reveal the kind of beauty the takes us to special places of awareness. You capture both forms in this poem Julie. You imagine what a ballerina might think as she interprets themusic.. a lovely poem Julie, one we should all dance to.. ~~redzone

[MsJewel]

Thank you for the lovely comment Curt. Have a a beautiful day :) Julie

[wordman]

and you did a perfect job on it Emily would be proud

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ron :) Julie

[A. Amos]

Compelling and enjoyable read. Well done!

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. thank you :) Julie

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Probably the best poem I've read on here so far. Invokes images and memories of summer as well as delicate ballerinas floating in ballets long ago forgotten. It is beautiful, LOVE IT.

[MsJewel]

I'm humbled by your very kind comment. thank you :) Julie

[MAC]

Julie, you must be the most discipline writer/poetess that I have ever read. To do this form and make sense alone would be impressive, but to do it and make beautiful poetry....wow. Yes, I tagged you with a wow.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Mark. This form really is quite simple. Try it. Hugs, Julie

[Saddam]

floating through a sky of blue
to dance ‘pon a cloud or two
sunbeams weave a light within
so shadows can’t find her when.

Beautiful new form. You always come with such a beautiful knowledge and variety.

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Saddam]

I'm great fan of yours writing dear. They are such_as garden's little bud.

[adreamer]

Julie, your writing never disappoint me this is so beautiful as soft as the flutter of butterfly wings are. :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Thank you Larry :) Julie

[adreamer]

I always enjoy reading your poetry :)Larry

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem for the dancer. I like the skilled dancers. They can take us to beautiful and wonderful places. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie

[Frieda P]

The embodiment of this spirit is utterly luverly Julie, you know you had me at the title, gorgeous my friend. :-)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Frieda :) Julie