The City of Rust

The City of Rust

A Poem by KeeD
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Corruption, Poverty, Addiction, Treachery, the city breathes all these fumes in very unstable volumes.

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The City of Rust

 

Metallic jungle, bronze streets

Liars entwine, heartless sleep

New age zombies of tyranny  

Control this twisted, sadistic society

 

Minerals extracted from the mass

Left the poor to reside in slums of brass

Corrosion slowly takes its grasp

Memories of past fidelity

Destroyed by envoys of perfidy

 

Birth to the magnesium fields

Dealers handing out happy meals

Injected mercury fills the vein

A lethal chemical mix for the insane

 

Addicted to the metallic spree

Savage life of a junkie

Copper filled eyes as the inner cogwheels turn

Slaves to metal, slowly their freedom burns


For in 

the City of Rust, Dreams combust

 


© 2012 KeeD



Author's Note

KeeD
Bored, had an Idea, wrote a poem lol >.< I slack sleep, sorry if it wasn't up to standards. xoxo.

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Your poem is HEAVY in more ways than one. Oh the wit!! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

3 Years Ago

haha so well said :P
Your poem gives an impression that you are a great metal fan. It was a fun read throughout except the couplet where you say: "Memories of past fidelity
Destroyed by envoys of perfidy" It touched a part of me which was completely disillusioned by the caustic ethics of the bigger town where I first lived beyond my cosy and warm little hometown.

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

For me this is an imaginary town i've created in my head for a story I wanted to write a long time a.. read more
I love this that is all I can say

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

< 3 thank you so much!
A very fine piece indeed..your personification of the materials so base and vestigial as a rich man's way to heaven and the poor's path to misery..is absolutely fantastic!!! Is it Mumbai that you referring to???

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

I wouldn't totally narrow it down to mumbai, Leaving room for the reader to imagine whatever messed .. read more
Beautiful.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

KeeD

4 Years Ago

You put a smile on my face :)
this could be lots of cities today...

this is life today---citified, technified, dangerous....what was beautiful has rusted away...

i get very sad when i drive in the country...although beautiful fields, pastures etc...i often see rusted out barns, no longer in use...

certain aspects of life are disappearing...not what it used to be when i was growing up...

this is quite poignant---

and universal regardless of what was behind the writing of it.

jacob

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the review and in regards to what you said about it being universal, that's absolutely.. read more
Your boredom produced a fine piece of writing. Tragic and thought provoking.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Only if you can produce Aishwarya Rai, she's hot! lol ;-)
KeeD

4 Years Ago

I'm hotter, "winks"
Frieda P

4 Years Ago

HA I bet your are, I have to appreciate the beauty of both sexes.
I've never been to Bombay but have seen the apathy on the television or films(Not referring to Slumdog Millionaire) and don't worry about the standards of the poem, those who know about the situation might even find it a befitting tribute.

P.S.- I hope you did not get offended if I used Bombay instead of Mumbai :P

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

Haha not at all, I often call it Bombay myself even thought it might not be "politically correct". A.. read more
Stonz P.

4 Years Ago

My name is Utkarsh and am most certainly enjoying your work.
Take care.
your use off vivid imagery of the disenchantment surroundings in this city/environments exquisite as well as once again your unique choice of words, capturing them in in in both rhyme and fluidity is truly amazing. a brilliant poem indeed, Mr. Keegan! try to catch up on your zz's, Kee :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

Rhyme is how I like to write poems :D , some times I get the feeling that maybe I rhyme too much, bu.. read more
ms. barrie

4 Years Ago

no i love this, it's a great write. seems i can only write now while listening to music, weird. and .. read more

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KeeD

Mumbai, India, India



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