Nobody home

 

I set alone in my dark room

Thinking how to cheer you

When all you really do

Is pull us both down

 

I’ve got 18 cigarettes to smoke

I’ve got no one here to talk

Or even listen to

 

You keep telling me not to mind

When it really aches inside

It hurts me more to know

That you feel blue

 

You say you have a bad lifetime

And I can’t tell you about mine

And I know you only suffer of solitude

 

I got a flashback of my hallow years

And headset on my ears

And a mute button is on

And nothing to listen to

 

And with every sigh

I ask ... “god why”

All I need is an explanation

For what I’m going through

 

I’ve got 7 empty cups on my desk

And nothing in my life to risk

Nothing worth living and nothing to long to

 

And all I got in sight

A cigarette and a light

I’m not alone but I feel

That there’s no body home

 

Reviews

[David W Moore III]

Sometimes you can be lonely and not even be alone. Depression is a tough one, and we want to be able to help those that are affected and you're right, when they are loved ones, it brings us down as well. It's really hard, they are hard to reach, and reason has nothing to do with it. In fact they can sometimes tell you they understand with logic, but that doesn't help. From my experience, all you can do is support, and keep yourself healthy enough to help when they'll accept it. Good write.

[bookworm]

MMmmm...yes, I am all too familiar with such experiences. I appreciate the way you've woven deeply profound questions into the context of everyday exchanges with our routine....coffee, cigarettes, headset with the mute button on...it makes it very real to the reader. Beautifully phrased and relatable..thank you...

[No use.]

honestly i feel when you're not alone, but feel alone, that that is worse than actually being alone.

[Omar Fendri]

... I couldn't find words to say... It's an amazing piece, heartfelt and so realistic. Numbers make it so real... The last stanza is, with no doubt, one of the best writings i've ever read. PERFECT CLOSE. Loneliness's baneful... and i felt the pain speaking aloud from your couple words. Well-done, I sincerely love it :)

[Emotionally Blank yet F..]

I agree with MoonFlower. i think this would be a wonderful basis for a song. Well written :)

[Moonflower]

this is my favorite piece from you, I think it could make a very good song, reminds me a lot of pink floyd.

[Coyote Poetry]

When I was young. I dislike being alone. With old age. I could use some private time. A sad poem. But sometime we need time to think and figure things out. a powerful poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Ouch...this is madly depressing...how well You show the despondency...You..You are there, dear, but it's as if no one was home because You, You are depressed too...and I'm falling...I'm falling and You don't notice...all I've got are these empty cups and cigarettes and asking why...screams help me...beautifully written

[Cherrie Palmer]

wow great job empathizing and expressing dispare