A Coward in Love

Whimsical

He sat yonder,
On lush green meadows
So still, unmoving, a part of the horizon
Reminiscing his ever confound past,
Filled with the cataclysm called Love.

A single girl, he ever loved,
A friendly soul, a dreamy smile
Kindled the fire in his heart she did,
Ever so slightly, ever so fortuitous
For he had fallen in love.

Yearned for her, he did.
Cowardice, his companion,
Confess to her; he never could
Satisfied by watching her, he thought he would.
Yet ignorant, of the impending storm.

He watched one day,
With teary eyes, and a broken heart ,
An unknown man, a familiar girl; walk past him
Arms linked, enjoying the other's company.
Heart broken he was, but could only realize his own folly,

For this was the fate that awaited a coward in love.

Author's Note

A whimsical poem about the fate that awaits a coward in love. Reviews are much appreciated. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

This was a poem that I could sense, but not feel. If that makes any sense! I understood where you were coming from and I could definitely look through your eyes at the situation. There was a perspective I never considered being something that could be made palpable - to be made into words. I like the fact that you wrote from your perspective and then unintentionally about the feelings of heartbreak. I've read, and have written, poetry that laments the feelings of heartbreak - the feelings of betrayal, pain, anguish - but, I can't recall a poem that focused on how the writer viewed the scenario. Often, the poem would be written about the feelings within the scenario. Good work.

[KingDavid]

Thanks for your opinion @BThomvanWart

[Tarry Franck]

Really enjoyed your poem. Wonderfully written.

[Ellen Kolman]

Reading your poetry was like touching silk, it was so smooth and pleasant ...... beautiful poem, great word pictures; I felt it and saw it all so clearly...BRAVO excellent write

[CiNtsaLis]

I love every inch of this write; the story; the regrets; the memory. *nodding head* (:

[Rem]

Lovely, especially in the aftermath of Valentine's day.

[KingDavid]

Haha. I agree with you there Lol.

[barleygirl]

This poem is unique, in that it shows a slice of life that I've not seen written about much -- EVER! I think it describes a TON of people, but they've been hiding quietly in the shadows, so this type of unrequited love is rarely written about, perhaps. I love the originality in your thought processes here. I think you've hit the nail on the head. I've had many men develop "crushes" on me, but they never reach out to try to get to know me. I know these cowards are out there in great numbers. You've given them a voice.

[KingDavid]

Haha! Thanks for the review @barleygirl !

[Ashley Renegade]

YASSS. I love this. Seriously bro, this is such a great picture of not chasing after the person you love. You will never know until you try.

[KingDavid]

Thank for the review! ^_^

[Ji Sung Moon]

well done. nice style of writing as well as creating the event of what the readers can picture as well. I liked it.

[KingDavid]

Thanks for the review maye! ^_^

[Yurie Lee]

Wow, so relatable! Believe it or not I experience something similar to this! While I was reading this I thought some vocab sounded weird but I mean, that's what poetry is like sort of, so. But yeah, this is really bittersweet and relatable. Nice work~!

[KingDavid]

Sorry abouy your sad experience. Well, this was a whimsical poem, so I ended up trying to experiment with the langiage Lol.
Thanks for the review!

[JokerforLife]

Nice one..but I feel u have complicated them with ur words. Could have made em a bit more easier to understand?

[KingDavid]

Haha. I did that on purpose to see how well I could use them. Thanks for the review!