Nighttime 'Mares

Hello ;)

I fell asleep,

Afraid to sing.

Watching as I lost the dream.

Then they appeared,

With open arms,

Weeping til the break of dawn.

I watched their eyes,

I trembled with fear,

I wish these things would disappear.

My wings appeared,

My teeth grew big,

They didn't know what had been neared.

I watched them die,

I slaughtered them all,

Sewing my final lullaby.

Author's Note

Sorry if it sounds scary or something...

Reviews

[KT]

It's good cause it sounds scary! Nightmares plague me often, so I find this poem very intriguing. The only thing I can say writing-wise, is that your rhyming is a little off. Other than that, sweet write!

[Laura Maidah]

The rhyme workers. And I'm not usually a fan of rhymers. Lol. The second stanza could use an effective simile or metaphor btw.

[kaylynnmelody♥]

I was a little scared with reading this, but I think this was a good mysterious piece. :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Less scary, more padantic it your rendition, a well placed piece.