Insecurity

Insecurity

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The bike and its rounds,

Everyday at this time,

The sound like a child

Whining in insecurity.

Air fiddles with her hair who

Stands at the balcony.

 

From there the air will go

To the lady amid

Rubbles. She wants pieces

Of her innocent daughter.

Though the bombed premises

 Has no security.

 

 

Reviews

[deadlife]

Awesome.. Brilliant work, you've said so much in so few lines.. It makes me sad. War. End. Search. Love. Lost. Memories. Life.
Simply a great write.
Thanks for sharing..

[H.]

This poem is so gray and rightfully so. Such a sullen reminder that life is not as kind to everyone as it may be to us in the first world. Losing a child to something so senseless and primal...I can't imagine the injustice. This poem still tugged at my heartstrings, though. This is very concise, and captured the moment so well.

[George Love]

Very nice work, well done.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A wonderfully written piece, it makes me so sad .. War.. this is a powerful poem .

Chloe
xoxo

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

wow. you use no fancy words or precise metaphor, but you still put an idea across that stands out in our minds through this good poem. the air moving over to the mother looking for "pieces of her innnocent daughter..." blew a wind of realization through my mind that we take for granted our everday when there are so many worse off out there. thanks for sharing. good job.

[None]

You really have a way with words and I like how the story continued through the air to the second part and was part of it as well. Very sad and well written.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Simple, lovely poem. Interesting images and emotions within this piece. You pulled it off.


Great Write.

[waywithwords]

Lovely poem and I loved the words"Air fiddles with her hair". What wonderful descriptive words my friend. I can tell too that you wrote from memory of a place you once lived. smiles. Annexxx

[Carrie Montgomery]

so very sad yet fitting for our times.

[Blue Bard]

Stunning in its simplicity and profundity. The picture is complete and the reader can see the dangerous place you portray. This is a favorite for me.