Lost Love

From the crumbs of my heart,
I divulge these words
Narrating two minds that fell apart.

My thoughts and pen rumble as sword fight,
trying to tell how hurt I am
And the tale of my tears by night.

Knowing she's no longer mine;
moments of extraordinary poignancy
but the reminiscence of memories we shared
Mould, on my face, a scarlet smile.

Sadly, my then ecstasy now turn fantasy.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[ANTO]

I really liked the start "crumbs of my heart" - I thought was very good, in fact the whole first verse/stanza/section I thought good.

The second was as good - the confilct of brain and feelings (pen) - as the first except for 'hurtful' - maybe should have been hurt ?? Hurtful makes me read you as being the transgressor, ergo I lose sympathy for you (the writer).

The third - the use of 'poignancy' doesnt sit well with me here - though I got what you were trying to convey and reminisce also didnt fit in my reading - how about 'recollected memories we shared - mould" - I loved the use of mould !!

It was a good poem LekANTIC - i enjoyed it.

[LekANTIC]

:)) thank you! really appreciate and glad you loved it....grateful for the review

[Jimmy Yetts]

Complicated emotions brought into focus and lyrically expressed,
Smart, unique styling.
Intriguing read, L.

[LekANTIC]

I'm grateful and happy you help review my piece, really appreciate, will definately heed to these corrections. Thanks again

[LekANTIC]

thank you, happy you love it

[Heartful5160]

Great work! Love is a very powerful subject to touch on in writing. I can't wait to read more work from you!