Another Life

Another Life

A Poem by Mae Morales
"

Fantasy world of mine

"

Wanting a better life

I know selfish little me.

Well but that's what I should have

Not this world, in the life I live.

Give me a life where theres no war.

There's no criminals, that I don't have to be trapped

Trapped in a house that I have to lock

Schools that lock to keep them out.

Some place peacefull.

Nature, all over.

Relaxing.

Where I meet the perfect guy

to sweep me off my feet

To tell me the truth never lies

No cheating no barrier between us

Someplace where I can get close with family and friends

NO fights, all fun.


© 2010 Mae Morales



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Mae Morales
Just writing what I'm feeling.

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A couple of minor tweaks to the spelling/typos (sweep rather than swept, there are no criminals rather there's and should instead of hsould) and this is a nice piece. It sums up many of the things that we all want regardless of our age or background. When written down like this it all seems very achievable and I like the way you sum it all up so elegantly with the phrase, "No fights, all fun". Overall a nice piece of writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A very sweet and naive poem...a longing for the perfect world.... and stated with such honest and childlike optimism...It'd e nicer if a few minor typos were taken care of, but overall, it is a very nice write...

Posted 7 Years Ago


A couple of minor tweaks to the spelling/typos (sweep rather than swept, there are no criminals rather there's and should instead of hsould) and this is a nice piece. It sums up many of the things that we all want regardless of our age or background. When written down like this it all seems very achievable and I like the way you sum it all up so elegantly with the phrase, "No fights, all fun". Overall a nice piece of writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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