Crash and Burn

I was listening to Savage Garden's "Crash and Burn" when writing this. Yay, inspiration? Syllables 1-2-3-4-5-6-5-4-3-2-1 (idea from Rain Kissed Secret) thanks sweetie!

Don't

You throw

Kerosene

Onto the fire

Things get worse and worse

Haven't you done enough?

Now, I crash and burn

My heart combusts

...Suffering

Are you

Blind?

Author's Note

What do these words make you think of? Do you recall a bad memory/ experience? My goal is to hope that someone feels something when reading this. Please comment =]

Reviews

[Aldora Sparrow]

-whistles- Hot! Haha. Just kidding. I really liked the spiciness of this. The shortness and power of each word. I like this style. It reminds me of the Haiku style: Short and full of meaning because you can only choose the best words. I think you pulled this off really well. Deep fiery passion...Very nice. Just a slight typo. "enough" isn't spelled with a T, lady. -smile- If it wasn't for my OCD, I probably would've missed it. Otherwise, very nice. And yes, I shivered a little (which is a little ironic) so Mission Complete. Keep it up! Win more contests! Fighting!

[Hope]

This reminds me when my friend went out and completely messed up his life after getting it back in order after all the help he received. We miss him very much. Thank you for such wonderful ideas, for the memory rush and such a great write! ^_^

[smiggle wiggle]

i love this :D
it makes me think of my ex-boyfriend though :/

[Rain Kissed Secret]

"On the fire" is only 3 syllables honey. Though i like your topic ^-^ very nice. Keep practicing, it took me forever. Almost a year to make it the way i sorta wanted it and i still have a long while to go.

[Theresa]

This poem definitely has the effect that you were hoping for. Someone who you love who doesn't know when to stop and only makes a situation worse. It is written and flows well. Nicley done.

[Momo the Elf]

very nice write! i absolutely love the syllable pattern~ it really gives more life to the poem. and yes, i do feel something when I read this poem. for me, i can see all the burning pain and red-hot anger, both lit by someone's careless, blind actions. haha. great poem~ :D