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Quietus

Quietus

A Poem by Brittany Zedalis
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Today is my moms birthday. 1964-2013.

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Today, as the clock strikes twelve, 
I am thrust through starlight and nebulas 
back to an era long since past, 
where freedom rang from the sky above 
and your voice was the very foundation beneath my feet, 
your long, slim fingers grasped my hands, 
lifting me from perdition into light, 
again I am swept away into memory, 
as once again you lifted me up, 
instead in this moment it was to cheers 
and tears fell down your cheeks in pride, 
violently I am ripped from peace, I remember, 
the consistent clicking of machines and staff scurrying by, 
anxious, waiting, pacing, 
then relief so brief filled my heart as yours continued on, 
but in finality, I stumble into the darkness, 
 your heartbeat beating on so slowly 
that I felt mine would stop if a moment of silence passed, 
and suddenly I am choking, I am pleading for air and life 
while reaching for those long, slim fingers that once lifted me up, 
I crash, and I am fallen.


by Brittany Zedalis in Dead Snakes Poetry 

© 2017 Brittany Zedalis



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I really love how you used the images of space and stars to evoke a sense that we have a very particular point in time in which we exist. At least that's how I felt reading it. As if it's difficult for souls that long for the eternal to exist through these temporary situations. I found this very well written and definitely expressing emotion.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much! This is a hugely important poem to me. I wrote it on my mother's most recent birt.. read more
Nila Morrill

2 Years Ago

Very well done, and very touching.



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What a very eloquent and beautiful poem.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

5 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.
What we have here is a genuinely moving little gem of a poem that in its own desperate way, is a tribute to a much loved & likewise missed mom....N

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

5 Months Ago

This December will make 4 years since she died, and I still feel her loss with every breath I take. .. read more
"a moment of silence passed,
and suddenly I am choking, I am pleading for air and life"

Posted 11 Months Ago


Brittany Zedalis

11 Months Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read.
Sami Khalil

11 Months Ago

You are welcome...............
I really love how you used the images of space and stars to evoke a sense that we have a very particular point in time in which we exist. At least that's how I felt reading it. As if it's difficult for souls that long for the eternal to exist through these temporary situations. I found this very well written and definitely expressing emotion.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much! This is a hugely important poem to me. I wrote it on my mother's most recent birt.. read more
Nila Morrill

2 Years Ago

Very well done, and very touching.
To feel someone's love so completely is one of the greatest gifts ever bestowed on another … you are very fortunate to have had such love; its beauty stays with your for a lifetime; you will never lose it, never. Fantastic write, B:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you for such a heartfelt response.
"I am pleading for air and life while reaching for those long, slim fingers that once lifted me up, I crash, and I am fallen". What a brilliant write! Your mom would be proud of this. RIP.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
Your words awaken us all to this painful place in you, these reflections of your past, your precious mother slipping from you into this darkness. And I know that these hurting memories will rise, as well as every loving, beautiful memory in you in days and years to come. She is alive in you, and your precious, beautiful words let us see glimpses of your wondrous love.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

I was going to respond to this earlier but this site wouldn't let me for some odd reason.
Th.. read more
An owl on the moon

2 Years Ago

May her precious memories keep you always inspired, and always filled with the joy of writing; of cr.. read more
Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Yeah, losing her has been hard. It's been almost 2 years now and I can't believe it. It still feels .. read more
A fitting tribute that will echo through eternity and lift up the ones left behind to find hope and solace. All rich blessings...:)......

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

As I was hoping it would be. Thank you, friend.
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)....................
Amazing journey, and to know it's real and that you have endured it is amazing in itself.
Well played! ^^

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you for this (:
Bluefire

2 Years Ago

No problem =3
Luna, such a beautiful and painful poem dedicated to your Mom's memory. xo


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Yep, that it is, haha. Usually it takes time for me to write ones like this down, but this poem near.. read more
Julia Mars

2 Years Ago

Sometimes the feelings pour not just in tears but in ink, words, poems.
It's a great outlet. .. read more
Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Indeed, it is. I don't know where I would be without poetry and literature.

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💎💜💙 Mommy to my Evangeline Lilly 💙💜💎 My name is Brittany, but I prefer going by Luna. I'm a married 25 year old mother of one adorable litt.. more..

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