Shades of Grey

 

There is no other just you and I

Living with me you thought you would die

A stone at hand and a reason why

Burning in me liberations sigh

 

A flame of a township in my heart

There is a stage and I have my part

All my shed tears now a work of art

Here is the new dawn here is its start

 

Nail all my hopes and dreams to a mast

Tell me freedoms song is iron cast

Forget bloody wounds it cannot last

Cold memory a train flashing past

 

Hear the pain filled drumbeat in the night

Swallow bitter pills of black and white

Reviews

[lost girl]

i must say i am left wanting more. i was being sucked up and then your tornado violently threw me to the ground. SPLAT! story of my life.

[Victoria Elizabeth]

Very good, I love it!!!

[Mia]

This is so amazing! WOW! Mind blowing.
"All my shed tears now a work of art"
That is such an intense line. It literally made my heart beat faster.
"Swallow bitter pills of black and white"
Very clever line. Both people are bitter and how can you move forward without letting go of the bitterness. I'm not saying forget, no! Never forget...remembering is the key to ensuring it never happens again. But letting go, the past is the past and try as we may...we can never change it. The rainbow nation...HA...what a joke! Until we are fully honest about the baggage this country has all we'll be is a country that confuses community with co-existence.
If you have time read a blog entry I posted.
http://mia-dontbeafraidtohateonme.blogspot.com/2012/08/its-black-its-white-its-racism.html

[Weezie76]

Love love love it! Thank you for sharing!

Wow, Moon, this is a well thought out write, with beautiful insight line by line:
"Nail all my hopes and dreams to a mast" that means for me much, as I interpret it as reaching further than a point you're in right now... you want to be further... grow above pain, and in your last stanza you explain it excellent.
A very good write!


E.L.

[Cole Hayley]

Ah you did it once again. The ending truly sells it all

[Cathy Wattam]

Wow, really like this. Lovely flow and yet, to the point. I have some competition in the rhyming department!!!

[Ruth]

Beautiful piece! Effortless flow and wonderfully voiced...this was a pleasure to read hon...
Thought provoking
xo

[linear]

Good use of rhyme that didn't interupt the flow as many do, what would poets do without love, good or bad......well constructed poem :O)

[linear]

This is really amazing.....I was once in crazy love with a girl from a township.......in the end she near broke my heart, but I learned such a lot from her, and she gave me a gift.....and that gift was my writing....I think I love your Poem.......no I dont think, I know that I do...thank you. :O)

[Jazmen]

I really appreciate your style.. you can tell that you consider the flow, the purpose, and your vocabulary to be very important to what you're trying to convey, it creates an atmosphere, this is very grey, indeed, a great title.. I liked this because it seems to come naturally to you, you have talent! Keep writing!