Forgotten

i wrote this at 1:40 in the morning i just felt inspired

My books sit quietly on the dusty shelf,

since you left me months ago, 

I don't know what to do with myself,

The stars keep crying every night,

for you- to change your mind,

for me- to make it right

The birds forgot to sing our song,

after all this time alone,

remind me where we went wrong

Reviews

[Kristallo]

This is beautiful, poignant, and dewy with nostalgic isolation. "The stars keep crying every night, for you- to change your mind... for me- to make it right." That's poetic perfection in a few short words. The way you've evoked the deepest ache of my heart in three short stanzas is a rare thing, and a brilliant gift. I feel much the same as you must have when you wrote this. It's really very good. Thank you for sharing.

[Mandyy Reed]

Thank you so much.I really appreciate your lovely review.Thank you for taking your time to read it.I'm sorry you had to go through this pain.I've been there myself,as you said and It was a lesson learned.After you have learned your lesson ,you just simply move on.Thank you once again for reviewing.

[ewest1220]

Very bleak. The simplicity and upfront tone, coupled with the imagery make this a very powerful read. Loved it!

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Lol 1:40 in the morning? Uhm I'd be knocked out sprawled on my bed, dreaming and drooling and snoring haha. Anyway that's awesome how you can write this, its a great poem woot woot :D

[Hester Vane]

Short and simple! Beautiful!

[Jibey]

Sad, wistful, reflective... as it can be at 1:40 in the morning lol

[Hanhil]

I love the flow of this poem. I love the way each para seems to start with a new note yet blend in so meticulously. And I am a big fan of simple lines with not much of a metaphor in them. :-)

[Mandyy Reed]

Thank you so much for reviewing and taking the time to read it.I'm really glad you liked it. (( :

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometimes the internal struggle in our head can lead us to a better place. I like the flow of thoughts and the good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mandyy Reed]

You are too kind,Coyote.Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

Nice poem...

[Mandyy Reed]

thank you

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...