Unbelievable

You're not going to believe this.

 

Unbelievable

Mark Pearce © 2007

 

 

“I can’t believe you’re not a rabbit,”

The spindly weeper said.

“With furry ears and springy bones

And a wintry, bunny sled.”

 

“I can’t believe you don’t like carrots

And parsley in your stew.

I can’t believe your bum’s not capped

With a poof-poof cotton ball, too.”

 

“I can’t believe you don’t like Picasso

And your nose doesn’t twitch in clover.

I can’t believe your big brown eyes

Are blue and grey all over.”

 

The spindly weeper ground his gums

Till a big ol’ smile broke through.

“But here you are, my good, good friend.

I can’t believe it’s you.”

Author's Note

Happy reviewing.

Reviews

[Angel's Lady]

Unbelievably silly. Good job of that!

[Emily B]

This seems like an old friend, even if we did just meet. Whimsy and earthy. Two of my favorite qualities in a poem.

[Forest Green]

Nice, very nice...has a cute mystery to it. Charming, absolutely charming.

I enjoyed your poem very much.

Forest

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is delightful. A sweet story. What a lovely tale. Thank you for sharing. Great write.
Light,
Siddartha

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Oh, this is such a cute piece. Nice write!!!

Heather

[JC]

A little "Theodor Geisel" is always great and puts a smile on everyone's face. Humor goes along way in life as well as poetry.

[Todd]

This is a very refreshing poem from a lot of the depressing work that people put up here (I'm guilty of that, too.). I enjoyed it very much, the rhyme is natural and the rhythm flows well. One thing: "I can't believe you're your bum's not capped" - I think you just forgot to delete "you're." Once that's fixed, you should submit this to some of the contests on the site. They help out a lot in getting reviews and a bigger name in our quickly growing community.

[My Name is Brenda and I..]

What a pleasant surprise. Your poem brought a smile to my face. It evoked the poems my aunt read to me when I was child; and like most simple poetry it contains a universal truth. Well done. And welcome. Brenda

[Kelly D. Burris]

Mark, this is a lovely and whimsical piece that I really enjoyed and I'd bet children would love it in a book. I can just see the pictures to go with it! Wonderful write. Really like it.
Kelly

[jen -- JG]

Thank you for making me smile today. A good fun read and I think the kid in most of us with enjoy it too.

Will be smiling for awhile now.

Jen