Sins

ruffling through my old pages lately....

If darkness had a name

What would you call it?

Someone who could take the blame

that is yours…but you’re afraid to admit

 

Wicked lilies at your door

Daring you to pick them up

Tsk,tsk…this darkness…easy to adore

Drinking your tears from morality’s cup…

 

Ascending…descending from this debasement

Because our obstinance is leading all the time

So who gets to decide the final assessment?

And who gets to write the infinite rhyme?

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Hearthis]

Nice poem! :D I give you a glorious thumbs up!

Specifically, I like the tone and mood of the poem, especially during the second stanza. It captures the same sense of an ominous aura of soft danger as the idea of sins and blames. It carries that same tension when one is blamed and pondering whether to confess or let guilt swallow them whole.

But hey, nice poem! Hope you write more in the future! :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much for the lovely review Marthis :)

[RRavi Verma]

You have the golden pen to spark into the core of Human mind & sole .

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much for the warm words :)

[RRavi Verma]

Always welcome

[Emily]

I love the first lines!
I would call the darkness the Black Light.
Keep it up!!

[Ana B.]

Thank you a lot Emily!

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

"Ascending…descending from this debasement
Because our obstinance is leading all the time
So who gets to decide the final assessment?
And who gets to write the infinite rhyme?"
Timeless questions and answers indeed. Loved it! A very apt title for this beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing, Ana B.! ☺

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much for the lovely review Raja :)

[ANTO]

Sometimes its hard to accept blame when others can have blame hoisted upon them to save our own skins - thats when our true selves comes to the fore and we can decide what type of person we are going to be - crocodile tears then ensue
I can see the dilemma posed - is it our fault then or did we just act as we have been programmed/predisposed to act. That goes right back to Adam and Eve then - God made the serpent who tempted Eve - God knew Eve would be tempted and would fail therefore did he create the circumstances that has us all here where we are now.
Love 'wicked lillies', Ana.
Very interesting piece my friend.

[Ana B.]

Sometimes it's hard to look in the mirror.....because in those moments we realise, that there was no serpent who tempted Eve.....because it's all about the choices....and blame comes only when we wish for another outcome....maybe the biggest question is wether we are were we're suposed to be....
Thank you for stopping by my dear friend :)

[~]

Hmmmm this poem is trying to explain a question that we have to decide for ourselves. It made me think a lot and I hope you don't mind that I am sharing with you:
I think there are two options: a higher being (God) or ourselves/humanity. Then it opens another set of questions: if it is not God then who makes these rules? If we make our own rules, then why do I have to call "darkness" sin? Where does morality stem from if we deny a higher power and we believe we are here only as a survival of the fittest?

[Ana B.]

i think the distinction between God and Man is more subtle....maybe he makes all the rules, or leaves us the choice...darkness is just another shade of the light....if it looks back, maybe that's a reson for that....in any case.....i'm not completely sure what is this poem about :)

[~]

It is sometimes in our ramblings where we find insights :) I do this too :)

[Ana B.]

:) yup, sometimes other people do that for us....

[Coyote Poetry]

So many question and so many answers.
"Ascending…descending from this debasement
Because our obstinance is leading all the time
So who gets to decide the final assessment?
And who gets to write the infinite rhyme?"
I liked the above lines a lot. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry dear Poet.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

who knows what's more important - questions or the answers......
Thank you very much John, for stopping by in my lil world.

[Coyote Poetry]

Both are needed and you are welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we may find someone at our door who would take the blame for us, but we still have to live in the house of our own heart and soul...and we cannot avoid that final assessment of our own lives.

love this piece.

[Ana B.]

so who holds the ultimate power? we?

Thank you for stopping by Jacob.

[R Smith]

the first stanza is one of the finest i have seen, an excellent message to take a good look at ourselves, maybe see our own faults first before we cast our stones, thank you Ana, great work as always :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you very much Richard, your reviews are a treasure :)

[R Smith]

thank you Ana, your poems are a treasure for me :)

[Daisy]

wow! amazing...... thumbs up for you (Y)

[Ana B.]

:) thank you very much !

[Deepika]

Wow!
"Someone who could take the blame
that is yours…but you’re afraid to admit" --These lines are so true.

"Drinking your tears from morality’s cup"--This one is artistry!

"final assessment", "infinite rhyme"-- Contradictory phrases, but powerful usage!

[Ana B.]

Thank you for stopping by D :)