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Truthful pretense

Truthful pretense

A Poem by Ana B.

Sweet darkness, timidly

play your ghostly notes

Of this unfinished symmetry,

As I live on borrowed quotes.

 

Tears of liquid sovereignty inside -

Forever unspoken tales…

Behind bogus happiness I hide

Chasing holographic trails…

 

And if the dead can dance

Why can’t I do it too?

Tempests of hollow romance

I have yet to subdue…

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


© 2017 Ana B.



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OOh that's lovely, melodic and dark. It's hot pot of all what's not and all that can be. Unfortunately they separate like oil to water, whatever can we add to 'mix to combine'. Very nicely done Ana X

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Very well said :) Thank you KWP :)
This is thought-provoking . . . the title is well-stated & I love playing with the contrasts of life, as you've done so well here. Your rhyme & rhythm is well done & sophisticated with complex word choices. The best part is that it sounds very original to me (((HUGS)))

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the beautiful review :) Hugs!
Love the musical reference to 'The Double Life of Veronique' (Fascinating French Movie/score) - your poetic words reflecting an unusual romance (perhaps with a puppeteer who may be able to facilitate her existential issues). Very well penned … :-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Phill :) I'm glad you caught the ''The double life of Veronique'' fragrance :)
So sad but not self-pitying. Resigned. How does one make resignation seem so dignified as you've done here Ana?
You choreograph words - we all have our 'place' - lol

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the awesome words my friend :)
Where do you find such lovely images? They're sooo pretty. And I love how your poem just dances, It's truly beautiful, I am in awe of your writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

I have a thing for watercolor paintings :) Anytime i come across one that i like, i'm all like: ''hm.. read more
Kesha

1 Year Ago

That's awesome and you're welcome :)
I love this well constructed poem of bitter-sweet contemplation. Clever words and a beautiful painting. I hope those 'tempests of hollow romance' get duly subdued for her.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much :)
I love this. It is written so wonderfully! Keep writing! x :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Thank you :)
The living can never dance like the dead... silly lady.

Romance is only overrated when your single... it's always darkest before the dawn... etc. etc.

I lost my train of thought, the ending reminded me of the "corpse bride" too much. I think I'm going to watch that tonight.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

lol. i don't know why, but reading this cracked me up a lot. Had to try my hand at sort of romance, .. read more
D. David

1 Year Ago

I think you'd enjoy "Corpse Bride" quite a bit.
okay, Ana....i have to be honest here...

besides loving the entire piece and its theme...

to me, the first stanza is so brilliant and is a poem in itself....

j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the wonderful words Jacob :)
A chilling and somberful poem...
I felt lots of emotion and thought in this...
Well done, keep it up!! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana B.

1 Year Ago

Thank you Mr Writer :)
Mr.Writer

1 Year Ago

No problem :)

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