Dying of Thirst

Dying of Thirst

A Poem by Kelly Scheppers

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Dying of thirst

 

 

His lips placidly conformed

to the bottle’s annular opening,

his thirst

momentarily quenched

as he grasped the curvature

of its tapered neck.

 

He consumed the malted liquor,

fervently licking the heady delight

repeatedly  from his lips.

 

Just once, she wished

he would take her

with the same

unchaste provocation…

 

her insatiable need,

momentarily quenched.





© 2017 Kelly Scheppers



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Excellent portrayal of this vignette as she watches his fervour for his beer and wishes he would desire her as much. That she seeks 'unchased provocation' suggests perhaps an unrequited love as she longs for something illicit, an affair perhaps?
Which ever you inject the emotion of her desire and sense of frustration so well Kelly.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kelly Scheppers

4 Months Ago

I appreciate your acknowledgement of that, John. Thank you!
Kelly, I know one thing for certain: Whenever I read one of your pieces, I'm certain to be left in awe.
This poem is beautiful in how it combines many emotions and leaves a sense of mystery throughout. First, you have the man with his alcohol addiction, and then, for a softer feel, you have the woman yearning for her man's love. The two nuances blend well in this piece.
I also like your choice of detail in how it captures the moment, but still allows the reader some room for interpretation. Take the ending for example: it lets the reader fill in his or her own details without making the poem feel incomplete. Excellent work!

- William Liston

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kelly Scheppers

4 Months Ago

Consider yourself hugged, my friend - what a wonderful review! Thank you so much, Will!
oh if only---his lips for the lips of the bottle...
would be a great trade off, if only he would succumb to her instead of his addiction to the alcohol...
love the twist of this..like twisting off the cap...he needs to take a swig of her.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kelly Scheppers

4 Months Ago

Indeed! Lol, much appreciated, J!
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Kelly Scheppers
Kelly Scheppers

San Diego, CA



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