Seashell on the ground

Seashell on the ground

A Poem by Najam Us Saher
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Like a seashell on the ground.

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SEASHELL ON THE GROUND 
Like a seashell I remain on the ground,
Some notice and pick the best ones,
While some are left around.
I feel I am the left one which no one cares about,
I have been picked once,
But thrown back to the ground.
I feel I am the worst surrounded by the best,
Like a seashell which is lying on the beach,
I feel so alone untouched and beyond one's reach.
I still feel lonely when I have everyone around,
I am diving deep in my agony,
I am waiting to be found.
Care for me before I am buried in the ground,
Otherwise I would be merely lying,
Like a seashell on the ground.


© 2017 Najam Us Saher



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Oh my.. so beautiful, so heart touching.. using a seashell, one of the beautiful things on earth and made it so sad, so lonely. We all crave to be noticed but usually never get that. Sometimes it isn't so bad not to be noticed though. Yes, it might be lonely.. but you won't always be though someone will notice you one day, it might be difficult though for them to come up to you because they also knows how much it hurts to be pushed away and unnoticed. Ahaha I got carried away again. Anyway I really love this poem, I can't wait to read more from you ^^

Posted 2 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

2 Months Ago

Such heart touching review. I am overwhelmed to hear such kind words from you. Thank you very much .. read more
Such a creative idea! Your poems are so....... Poetic

Posted 11 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

That's so good to hear. Thank you so much. ☺
This is an interesting metaphor you used here! I think it's not a bad thing to want to be noticed but we have to realize that we can never be appreciated as what we are by everyone, only to some..and therein would be our contentment.
I loved reading this. Beautiful write 👍

Posted 11 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much. I agree with your views. ☺
Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

You're welcome, Najam! My pleasure 😊
well expressed using SEASHELL. from your heart your wrote this? So lonely?

Posted 11 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

Yeah. I have written this. Thank you so much for reading I am glad that you liked it. :)
I like the usage of something beautiful and fragile. A seashell. Surrounded so many other beautiful objects. We do tend to get lost in the fray, passed over and forgotten because we aren't as bright, as beautiful. I love this poem genuinely. Very good job.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much :) sometimes we do really overlook and unnotice many things.
A really very creative plot to write on. I wonder what made you think of it. I like how you've compared the feel of getting attention to a seashell :)

"Like a seashell I remain on the ground,
Some notice and pick the best ones,
While some are left around."

My favorite lines from this poem

Posted 11 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

I wrote this for a contest Like a seashell was the line given. I am grateful to Michael S for creati.. read more
The poem tell me you seem to be calling out for attention and respect. I believe everyone in life does the same. Everyone deserves to be noticed, cared for, and respected. I love the way you rhymed it!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

Yes I agree with you. Everyone needs a little attention and concern just to make them feel that they.. read more
Sad, emotical, yet a beautiful piece.
Thank you for sharing..

Posted 12 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

12 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading :) keep reading my work whenever you like.
Surya

12 Months Ago

You are welcome, and ofcourse I will.
Wow such a lovely piece! I love how you have captured perfectly what it feels like to be lonely and unworthy. It also made me feel sad for shells as well that aren't as pretty as the rest. Impressive read 😊

Posted 12 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

12 Months Ago

Thank you so much :) I feel widely elated to know that you liked it.
This was composed of two very interesting concepts: loneliness and self-worth.

These two concepts are very versatile because they can be in cooperated into a story in so many different ways. Overall, you REALLY hit the mark with both concepts because when people feel lonely, they also feel a bit inadequate.

~~N. Brooks

Posted 1 Year Ago


Najam Us Saher

1 Year Ago

Yes you are right. Thank you so much I am glad that you liked it ☺

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Najam Us Saher

Hyderabad, India



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