Now You Have Nothing

Loads of negativity & nihilism from beginning to end. I imagine this might appeal to Emo's and Goths

Now You Have Nothing

Last night

She cried

Don’t leave me

I love you

And I need you

What shall I do

Without you

?

My darling

I will give you

Of my body

Come inside me

You have my mind

Already

Now you have everything

 

This morning

She cried

Now leave me

I hate you

And despise you

I’ll learn to live without you

You b*****d

You deceived me

I gave you

Of my body

You made my mind

Unsteady

Now you have nothing

Reviews

[Fay Slimm]

Such an about-turn in this penning of overnight changes in mind-set Nev. and starkly described in terms of female assertiveness which if I were a male would scare me into doing some introspection before I left - the title observes how raw was that final conclusion - - wow - no pleasing some is there -eh ?

[Neville]

Absolutely write Fay.. try as ya might its impossible to please everyone all the time .. I have certainly tried though .....

[Fran Marie]

o h my what a change
of heart within a short
time..love me, love me not
comes to mind a fine line
between love and hate
from one minute to the
next. but that's how
love i s sometimes..

nice work here

[Neville]

like walking a high wire it was .. better off out of it ..
thanks for stopping by Fran .. Hope you are both safe & well over there ...

Neville

[barleygirl]

This would've been me in my early nymphomaniac era, seeing each man (in a constant string) as the most scrumptious alive (intoxicated by pheromones) but the aftermath (your title: now you have nothing) ends up pretty much like this . . . utter disillusionment. Such is life in the realm of pure physicality! (((BANG))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

my guess is that this would have been a lot of people, if the truth were known ...

Thanks for stopping by and sharing (GROWNS) futiley, Neville

[Lorry]

Hey man! I find that so deeply offensive and feel the need to correct you. Goths and Emo's are as different from night is to..... Ehm, being in a really dark cave without a torch 😀
But seriously, I love this a lot. Well, at least until I hate it. Oh! Why is everything so complicating and confusing, desolate and intolerable?
Ooh! Coco pops?! 🤪
Ps... Do you like my new Avatar of Goth Trump? 😀

[Neville]

thanks for everything my friend ... life is like that I suppose and yes .. I love the new you sir and truly 😀 x

[AJNJ]

The female mind is very fickle sometimes sir. We just have to flow with it. Last night, there was the moon out in all its glory and there was everything. Now at daybreak, all is lost forever. The darling of yesterday is the b*****d of today and oh how we weep the fall from glory. Loved this superb, so realistic portrayal of romance!

[Neville]

love, like an elevator and indeed life itself, has more than its fair share of ups and downs.. dont it sir ... thanks for noticing and so eloquently ...

[AJNJ]

A true roller-coaster ride sir. Just gotta belt in. You're welcome always 🤗

[Chris Shaw]

What a difference a day makes. Without seeming unkind I'm thinking oh dear is this PMT or maybe par for the course. A very old poem here Neville you have given an airing to.

Chris

[Neville]

it might not be the best poem in the pack but I thought it might be worth more than just two comments after nearly seven years or so .. and I must have been right .. now its got four ... thanks to both you n Fay

:)

[Neville]

Perception or might I suggest interpretation way off mark & completely wrong.

Conclusion however, spot on... Ta & Ta ra, N

[Lyn Anderson]

Hard not to think of a mentally unstable spouse/partner. At least, that's where this one takes me. Well written.

[Neville]

Please accept my sincere apologies Ms. Anderson, I think almost seven years before I respond to a review has just beaten my previous record

:)

[Lyn Anderson]

lol too funny ... love ya!

[Neville]

aw gawsh ma'am ..and back at ya ...... x