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Another little love poem...

IT'S 3 A.M.
SILVER CLOUDS SWALLOW THIS SKY
A SKY THAT BLEEDS OUR SONG...

I CAN SEE YOU SLEEPING
GOLDEN SKIN OF A LOVE SO REAL
A LOVE THAT HAS LEFT ME WITHOUT YOU ONCE AGAIN...

YOUR WINDOW IS OPEN LIKE THIS NIGHT
SHINING LIKE A RAZOR BLADE AGAINST THE MOON
A SHINE THAT HAS LONG GROWN DIM...

IF ONLY A HEART COULD SPEAK
THE WORDS WOULD COME OUT AND YOU WOULD KNOW
THAT THIS SONG CAN SAVE US...TRUE LOVE CAN SURVIVE ANYTHING

Reviews

[Bunny Thumper]

You f****n cupcake.. haha ... sweet (: I like it

[Serend1p1ty]

A really emotional piece, well expressed.
I must say though, that it seemed a little too soppy & over the top.
It gave the emotions expressed less credibility.
Otherwise, it was a great write.

Yours truly,
cloud6

[Sarah Buchanan]

Hmm it's a good poem, although it's weird reading a poem you wrote about an ex g/f, but it's cool. :p I guess that love wasn't very true.

[No Longer Writing Here]

"SHINING LIKE A RAZOR BLADE AGAINST THE MOON " - awesome line. Your poems are very heartfelt.