Mere Scratches

Painting by Leidulf Tjugen

Mere Scratches

You cut into me;

blood is thicker than water

so I bleed real slow.

 

18/05/13

 

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

Nice short poem. Short yet simple and magnicificent

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Rhianne

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome

[DCT ponderings]

Mere scratches or as I might write and perhaps will...Just feelings.

Cuts with a precision only family can make. Great poem!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you DCT

[Nick.B]

Not if your in a Tarantino movie (crappy joke...) but still a good poem, bleeding slowly is one of the worst pain someone can endure, especially if it's something from your sibling, loved one and so on...great job

[Mark]

Children!!! Teenagers hurt LOL... but they grow up and even though mine have gotten closer to me, a parent's love is always much deeper and greater than a child's is.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Mark. Glad it is not just me!

[redflutterby]

Familial pain can be the most damaging. And unfortunately we bleed out from it slowly. Wonderful John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes and your children's indifference can be that slow haemorrhage.

[Kristin Lee]

The implications of this one are deep. If we take it at face value, yes, s scratch is just a scratch and will bleed real slow. But, we usually say blood is thicker than water when referring to family...so this implies pain, and a lot of it. Very thought provoking indeed.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Kirsten that is what I was trying to convey.

[Frieda P]

I feel this one John, bleeding out very slowly at this very moment. So few words, screams volumes.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Need to stop the flow dear Frieda, somehow.

[Frieda P]

Too many cuts John...you stop one, the other sneaks up on you....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Step away from the knives and apply bandaid!

[Leslie Philibert]

Good poem,and a good review from Lori who rightly notes that this is, due to its content a senryu rather than a haiku, good one..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Leslie

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wonderful Senyru, John. This is a typical human condition, of how family can cut us sometimes deeply, sometimes mere scratches, but always we bleed. Loved this!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Lori!

[quinfinn]

blood may be thicker, but water runs quicker. any cut is a cut to the bone, for humans are composed of mostly water. excellent senryu!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks PR just a piece about hurt and being resillient lol!

[quinfinn]

i got that, clever piece indeed!