Lying in the Twilight Zone

Hope always devours those who pursue it.

Waves crashing
Somewhere underneath a lost soul is thrashing
Head breaks the surface, a small breath is retained
Pulling its victim below, its teeth and jaw bloodstained

No savior will appear
As the monster pursues her, it feeds of her fear
Caught in the demon’s jowl
Its teeth sink in, causing the victim to howl

Lacerations down her chest
Is the victim dead yet?
Clawing for air
Only to find none is there

Swimming away, a blood trail left in her wake
But to no avail, it was a humongous mistake
The beast in anger roars
Shaking the ocean floor like a dinosaur

Closing in, the end is almost here
Pushed against a rock, its fangs puncture her body like a spear
Savored like a gourmet meal
Life leaving the victim with an anguished muffled squeal

Back into its hiding spot, the leviathan with a light disappears
Until the next fool dives to the depths, terminating their remaining years
Bones scattered across the basalt stone
Is all that is left of those who met their demise in the twilight zone

Reviews

[bigfootprint]

This is good stuff. You keep us on the edge of our seat, waiting for the next shark bite to devour our body parts. Ouch. You capture the abject terror of humongous mistakes. I like the incisive imagery that paints the sound and picture of all hope gone. Your uneven lines scream run and splay like bug splatter against the backdrop of the twilight zone. Even the "Bones.....is" even contributes to the instant finality of it all. You do good work.



Fav lines: "Bones scattered across the basalt stone Is all that is left of those who met their demise in the twilight zone"

[KCthelastboyscout]

I do enjoy nature programs especially when it involves a hunter and it's prey.i seen this particular savagery at some point or another and underneath the ocean its survival of the fittest
The tension you have built up in the description and wonderful imagery you have written makes this a fascinating poem to read