The Broken Angel.

The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Wants to show you love
Show she cares
Got God on her side
Sees rainbows in the air

The Soldier boy
Broken and gone
Feels only pain
As he looks upon
His only way

The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Is on a mission
Lives to save
God's number one
The prodigal son

The Soldier boy
Remembers the day
His life changed
In every way
He earned his pay

The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Is on the road
With love to share
Comes across her destined soul
Her little lost foal

The Soldier boy
Fires in haste
Fear in his eyes
He hears the cries
They wouldn’t die


The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Holds out her hands
To show she cares
Touches his face
Tries to explain

The Soldier boy
Tortured in mind
Flashbacks 
That make him blind
Just wants to die

The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Takes his tears
Takes his fears
Gives him love
Sets him free

The Soldier boy
Sees the light
Forgives himself
His earthly plight
Thoughts of death already ceased
The Soldier boy
Now at peace.

Reviews

[Unspoken poet]

Oh wow! this is so touching as well as sweet.
I really enjoyed this, it's kind of soft as well.
very nicely written.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks, avani. Glad you liked it.

[Mirror]

Now I am trying to marry this "broken angel(the Jesus Girl)" with these three stanzas;

The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Is on the road
With love to share
Comes across her destined soul
Her little lost foal

The Soldier boy
Fires in haste
Fear in his eyes
He hears the cries
They wouldn’t die


The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Holds out her hands
To show she cares
Touches his face
Tries to explain

Was she among the "They wouldn’t die" when he "Fires in haste"? Was that the reason "The Jesus girl with the long blond hair
Holds out her hands"? Is this the point of the Jesus girl's brokenness?

If not, it is the soldier that was broken; "The Soldier boy
Tortured in mind
Flashbacks
That make him blind
Just wants to die"

I would have prefer "Broken Soldier" to "Broken Angel" in my opinion according to the context. BUT!

Generally, this is a touching story. The zeal showed by evangelistic nature of Christian girl is exemplary. Her purpose was fulfilled especially to a soldier who have blood in his hands. I love this piece. It is encouraging for me as a believer. Thank you for sharing this.

I wanted something to read, and you gave me a good read.

[Paul Bell]

Yeah I see your reasoning.
I was trying to convey the angel as broken, because she was his personal angel. Now that he was dead. She was broken. I think i was being to smart.' With her destined foal'. But I'm glad you liked it.

[Mirror]

Okay, it makes sense.

[Mrudula Rani]

I would not consider her broken; she has God on her side, she has love to share. Takes tears and fears sets him free..

[Paul Bell]

She's not broken, he is.
She's a messenger from God, taking him home.

[Mrudula Rani]

Title said The Broken Angel! Iam glad to know that she is a carrier!

[Paul Bell]

I know, I was trying to convey that because he was dead, she was broken. In a sort of cac handed way.

[Mrudula Rani]

It is beautifully penned, and wonderfully painted with your words!

[Einstein Noodle]

i am taken back to the late 60's and early 70's and the Jesus People ... and of course the Nam war ... interesting interplay of characters .. the contrasts are sharp ... read a couple times ..forgive me if i am being too stupid ..but did he shoot her?.... its probably very obvious and perhaps i need to come back later and read again .. very relatable for me Paul
E.

[Paul Bell]

She was his guardian angel. Or was, since he died.
Though shooting her, might appeal to me too.

[Einstein Noodle]

ok...wasn't quite sure of that ;) thanks man ... :}

[R.E. Ray]

Wow, Paul. That hits hard! It's raw and intense. You take the reader on a journey through pain and fear, but end on a peaceful note, hope, even if it's just an end to the pain. Nice work.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks, Robert. Peace at the end.

[charlotte]

amazing read :-) i feel so sorry for the soldier boy and sad for the guardian angel who just wants to help him and wants him to be happy . emotive read .. you really wrote this well ... poor soldier boy :-(

[Paul Bell]

Life is cold at times.