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This is my first attempt at slam poetry, and I'm excited to film a performance of this piece over the coming day.
"Poetic Anatomy 101"

"Poetic Anatomy 101"

A Poem by PoeT4994
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Just a poets take on anatomy. I was tryin to use the sickest contradictory imagery I could come up with. Just tryin to make you see the body in a way that it was its own universe.

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Hello class, today we will be going over the general layout of what you will learn in this class.
I suggest you take notes:
Ribs concaving on lungs, exempting breath, gasping around blockages in the throat like swallowed fists, breathing through blows.
I inhale razor blades and exhale death.  Life dripping from my lips, salivating blood from my finger tips; because I talk with my hands, so please, listen with your palms.
Do you feel me?
As I walk on air my knees shatter from the force of dead breaths pushing not so silently against the eight balls of my feet; every where I walk I alter minds like drugs.
Every where I walk peoples health jumps, because the back of my feet heal.
My arms shatter at the touch of vast nothingness bearing down on souls.
Exempting life at the prescence of birth.
I be two spaces to the left as I bury each elbow below the ground of my ancestors.
Skull, concaving on intelligence, exempting brain matter...thinking around blockaded brain cells like a mental wall; logicalizing through stop signs.
I inhale dreams and exhale souls.
Life dripping from nose, pouring snot from blood pumping black holes.
I have an anatomy of hellistic angels on acid.
Envision through eyeless sockets, bleeding from your pours, sweating from my punctured heart.
Breath oxygen through hands so I can touch the sky.
I walk on atmosphere, green houses sprouting from my toes.
I walk with life drenched from my cuticals.
Cubicals, built off of broken shins.
Cracked companies trying to keep order amongst the oderless piles of trash that fall from my eyes, for all I see are mental wastelands.
Spines, snaking and cracking into question marks, questioning if I have enough backbone to stand up straight and shout...absolutely nothing.
Blocks of blank space, rolling off of my tongue with its triangular points puncturing my reptillian licks, sniffing...fumes of dying skin in my pelvis.
Crumbling into generations with genitalized leaders.
Society built off of dicks and p*****s.
A world built off of general hermaphrodization.
Wenis' tightening into zombies; stuck in a reach; grasping for hope with numb fingers.
It sucks when you can't grasp touch.
Well, that was today's lesson, hope it wasn't much for the first day.
I'll leave you with, welcome to Poetic Anatomy 101.


-artistic talent

© 2010 PoeT4994



Author's Note

PoeT4994
This just poured out of me. This is my true flow. When I sit and think about things, they're ehh. But my best stuff comes when it just tidal waves out of me, like this one did...it was just a cascade of words.

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I love when that happens, but so seldom do I get a chance to put it on paper. I really enjoyed reading this one though. I believe you may have stolen the words from my mouth to encapture and describe the many ideas included in this, for I have strolled along paths like this one before, and in truth, I didn't like what I found..

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tremendous Reality Depicted !!

Posted 4 Years Ago


I love when that happens, but so seldom do I get a chance to put it on paper. I really enjoyed reading this one though. I believe you may have stolen the words from my mouth to encapture and describe the many ideas included in this, for I have strolled along paths like this one before, and in truth, I didn't like what I found..

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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i enjoy your your work....... like, alot. but being new to peotry, you've opened my eyes, it's never really something i'd pay attention to, thank you. though i now enjoy it i cannot really say that my virgin mindframe is deep enough to fully grasp the meaning. but it's like you said, ( flick a peice of steel once, nothing happens, but keep flicking it and there's going to be a dent, eventually)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

haha...It was nice, very nice in a way.
Nice choice of words...
Well done!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The second half of this poem seemes to show a hidden meaning less descretley in my opinion. About the way the destructive world is, how it has become a coorperate world, about regrets to not stand up for values. I have no idea if this is really what you meant to be seen beneath the lines but great writing can be interpreted in endless different ways;it's like artwork. Very morbid, intense and leaves an impression. Try not to use the same adjectives too many times in one poem though; it takes away from the overall. But I enjoyed this poem great job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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i like this vary much

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is extremely deep and very interesting not to mention strange. But in a good way. It was fantastic. Wish I could write that intense.

Check out mine?

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was really deep, as most of of your writing. Haha. :)
But, really interesting word choice..made it interesting.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: Anatomy, body, metaphor, imagery, spoken, word, poetry, literary, spine, bones, organs, arms, legs, feet, company, sky, atmoshphere, green, house.


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