Haiku

Haiku

A Poem by nightdark

 

Feel the cold wind blow.

The breeze blows gently, calmly.

On that, warm autumn day.

© 2014 nightdark


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nightdark
what do you think?
how can i fix it?

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You are mentioning blow-blows twice. try to find another word. And gently and calmly are also almost the same.
The last sentence is too long for a Haiku.
Good luck.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Added on September 3, 2014
Last Updated on September 3, 2014
Tags: nature, autumn, haiku, love, life, live, gentle, calm