Look Mother !

Look Mother !

A Poem by Raghib

How a caring mother cares,
For her child to be all safe.
Away from the darkness,
She holds him secured to her breasts.
But cant you see the obvious,
In order to stop the evil,
She confined his own world .
And now he is trapped ,
In an unlit room of affection .
A place to be nurtured in,
A haven to reach out for,
When things go wary .
Look woman!
No matter how strong you can be,
You cannot go on forever.
Look what has your possession done,
It created chains unbreakable .
For today the same child stands,
Blinded by the truth .
The world is not the same,
As was shown in his euphoric chamber .
I watch him go in running ,
To wear those binds again .
Hoping you would keep him,
Close to your breasts today .
But you are sound asleep ,
Lost in your own blissful heaven .
Never to be woken again,
Even by his agonized screams .

© 2017 Raghib



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I find you deadly injured by an old wound that led you write this. But bro you puzzled me in if the mother is helpless won't god will help him?

Posted 8 Months Ago


A interesting poem.
"Look woman!
No matter how strong you can be,
You cannot go on forever. "
I believe a Mother's love is forever. In life and in death. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing word and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


Raghib

11 Months Ago

But after death, she is helpless coyote .
Hmmm, what a strong piece. It speaks volumes.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Raghib

11 Months Ago

Glad to hear from you Avia .
I think this is a lovely poem. Nice write, full of emotion and feelings.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Raghib

11 Months Ago

thank you for the visit . keep visiting
touching write my friend,a mother will always watch over you,on earth,or from heaven

Posted 11 Months Ago


Raghib

11 Months Ago

sorry dude . she is helpless out there
Beautiful. It is a moving poem.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Raghib

11 Months Ago

Thanks for visiting
I am moved, heart touching poem.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Raghib

11 Months Ago

Thank you Najam . glad to hear from you
Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

You're welcome.
Critique: A question for you, why do you have a space between some of your words and the punctuation?

Review: I found this an interesting topic but felt that you may have left some of your thoughts out of the story. There has to be a reason for the fear of this evil which is unknown to we your readers but it seems clear to you. I wish to know and understand that fear and envision that evil. I am not saying I don't like your poem, I am saying you left me wanting more, I want you to consider rewriting this and give me a stronger picture of the fear and evil that you have in your mind :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Raghib

11 Months Ago

the spaces are typo , nothing else . and I have left an option for the readers as to what they think.. read more

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