WARRIOR !

WARRIOR !

A Poem by Raghib
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In life we find a warrior within every one .

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Yes you do fail,
And you have been known for it .
A stardom achieved,
By the mistakes of a written destiny .
Yet you expect for remorse,
And you pray for it every night .
But even the shooting stars have shown,
A deaf ear to your pleadings .
You have been deprived of success,
And yet you are still working for it .
The staff of your belief ,
Never failing to make you rise again .
Yes you do fail,
For even the divine envies such warriors .

© 2017 Raghib



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Yes you do fail,
And you have been known for it .
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I'm afraid that a great deal of the story here remains in your head, leaving the reader with no context.

Who fails? No way to tell. Who asked the question? You don't say. What did they fail at? No way to tell.

Certainly, you're not talking to me. So who is it addressed to? To them it would have context and be meaningful. But to someone who just arrived, I need more than dramatic words. I need that drama to be attached to something that has meaning to me—either provided by the poem, or by its pointing to the context that exists within me..

Posted 1 Month Ago


This is a brilliant piece, I must say! Today is one rough day for me. And this is a big booster for me. Spot on words and clear expressions.

Thank you for the share. :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


A blunt, truthful message for all who will read your words. Strength, hope, and resilience are themes that shine through your poem, and a bit of "tough love." I especially like the warrior references and divine admiration. Impressive piece.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Keep going, keep going, that's the lesson life teaches. We will definitely fall, but strong is the one who gets up and keeps going. Nice piece.

Posted 1 Month Ago


It is beautiful and flows very well. Good work!

Posted 1 Month Ago


A powerful and beautiful poem! I adore the way your words play with my mind, and the way you make me see the world behind the gaze of honesty. Everything requires work- the import thing is that, although one might fail boundless of times, one should never give up. Because that, is what kills the soul- the understanding of having quit- even though one could have kept going.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Raghib

1 Month Ago

Yes indeed . This js what makes them a warrior. And I am honored I could make an impact because the.. read more
PandaPeaceful

1 Month Ago

I know what you mean. The world is fascinatingly connected to what is not real. However, I do believ.. read more
Hmm..
A strong piece indeed.
The exaggerated ending gives the punch needed for the poem.
Good work!



Posted 1 Month Ago


Raghib

1 Month Ago

The last line is actually in reference to greek mythology. The gods in greek myths ARE envious of w.. read more
Neetha

1 Month Ago

Got it Raghib:)
You have given a name to all those who try and fail repeatedly. I loved the way you have voiced their thoughts and showed them a positive way.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Raghib

1 Month Ago

Thabk you Najam . It seems only two people are reviewing my poems . Thanks a lot for your support
Najam Us Saher

1 Month Ago

It is my pleasure. No need to mention thanks.
so you get up and knock the dust off and start again,bring out that warrior

Posted 1 Month Ago


Raghib

1 Month Ago

Thabks wordman . Seems like only two of you are reviewing my poems . Means a lot

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