Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

A Poem by DylanChase
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Insanity Pleads...

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My chemistry betrays me as insanity pleads before lean-jaded depravity
seen scorn as a decrepit unraveling
of baffling mean-spirited entities gathering deceitfully
for more pandering of reality in a gallery slinging misery entirely...

My sympathy behaves erratically
seethes forlorn as heated apathy forms rapidly
soft-churning rhapsody squirms passionately...

Inevitably heart-warming tragedy occurs.

Fiendishly hard-earned philosophy
turns of metaphor laced individuality...

Blurred and slurred rhymes.

Aggressive lines wormed into the tapestry of sadism
this organisms mechanism of limelight fading posturism
burning eyes turning bright from realism
shading light from mine minds rind empty escapism
slime heavy kinda heady with the infectious algorithm...

 Swirls bleeding lecherous breathing escaping the rhythm of morbid reality
 curiosity yearns for instability
With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree
 gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy
 floating dead in the sea flamboyantly... 

© 2017 DylanChase


Author's Note

DylanChase
Same poem (mostly)... But now edited... Yay...!

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the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I s.. read more



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I had to re-read. Not because it was bad! I enjoyed the rhythm of it so much I kinda got lost! Genuinely good work. You can feel the devotion to writing this well. I'm not a pro or even a poetry critic, but I genuinely found myself enjoying this. Nothing negative to say here.

Posted 1 Week Ago


In my opinion, this is really genius. I absolutely loved it, but then again I am a little messed up in the head.................I'm giving you a 100 on this.


Posted 9 Months Ago


Your poetry has opened up my mind to a new genre, and I love it! I will not pretend I am able to dissect it word for word to uncover hidden meaning (perhaps that isn't the your intention), because I am relatively new to this writing style, BUT it is such a wonderful shower of interrelated words, creating images, all sorts of images; it creates an amazing visual and auditory experience! The rhythm and internal rhyming- genius!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Mary, thank you so much...!
These are the comments I live for!
To have inspired/opened.. read more
Got this image of a serial killer slowly building up for the kill.
Practice makes perfect sort of guy.
Could you imagine the judge reading that line out. So, you were on an itty bitty gallant killing spree.
You just know that's a hundred dollar fine. Mind you, what's that state where they wear pink overalls. That's a punishment in itself.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Oh damn, mate...
These poems are all so old, good...
But old...
Wanting to re-.. read more
Paul Bell

2 Years Ago

Bloody readers. lol
DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Rofl... Ikr...

"What an emotional piece! have you thought of using less dictionary?".. read more
the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I s.. read more
Wonderful piece with great vocabulary......

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.
I loved the use of the language.
With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree
gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy
floating dead in the sea flamboyantly..."
The above lines. Perfect use of words.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

Always a pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.
It reads like Lewis Carrol riffing on Emily Dickinson at first and as cool a trick as that is. their is a confessional quality to the impression, that it projects onto the reader that is astounding.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

2 Years Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.
Once again, I really like this one a lot becuz it seems like the meaning of the message is more prominent than your rhyming, which is always good, but better when it doesn't distract from your message. I very much like the intensity of imagery here, which is contrasted by a seeming nonplussed attitude about it all. Great job. I haven't had a chance to check out your new rhyming website (thanks for the invite) but I was slammed by a pain flare for a week (fibromyalgia) & now I'm just starting to come alive again! *whew!* I'll get there sooner or later! *smile* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DylanChase

3 Years Ago

Appreciate the review, Barley, and do not worry... It is a very laid-back thing... No obligation or .. read more

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