Pure

My love is so true

My blood is so pure

My heart is so broken

But there is no cure

My lips are so lonely

My mind so blank

Th memory of you is one I can't erase

My breath is so toxic

My mind so unfair

My emotions are open to the ones who dare

My laughter so loud

My crying so weak

My soul so cracked as I sit at your feer

My life has crumbled

It will never be the same

And through this disaster I am to blame

Reviews

[Nick Erickson]

A very emotional piece here. Very base and strait forward.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! This is such a beautiful piece, full of vivid and raw emotions.
Very well written as the flow is really impressive...
Also, the feel and the emotions behind the write is something I call very deep and real..

It's a beautifully sad but a strong write.

"My laughter so loud
My crying so weak."-I simply loved these lines a lot..Superb! :)

[BeautyFromTheEarth93]

so full of passion! i love it!

[LostCauze[:P]]

The flow of the poem was consistent. Every line was full of emotion. The structure was terrific. The poem was very enjoyable and well wrote. Keep writing.

[Fmasil Mom]

THIS IS REALLY GOOD

[youngwriter222]

this is a good poem with nice smooth rythem, full of emotion about love and fear. Your emotion shows who you truely are.
Keep writing
~Sarah

[ah]

this is awesome, i love the line my breath is so toxic it makes me think ur breath stinks but it could also mean that ur words are terrible towards urself and or other people... u should put an apostrophe in line 7 for "can;t" and add a letter "t" to the word "si" in line 13.... and the last line should be "through" or throughout" for the 2nd word... keep writing, its really really good

[Cathy]

Full of emotion! Beautifully written!

[Lewis Solo]

There is nothing but truth when i read your words. Thank you for expressing and giving me a chance feel with you.

[Alayna]

i love it !!!! it is so filled with passionet emotion i loved it!!!!


***Love Alayna***