A gust of wind!

I am sitting at my office desk. There is a power crisis this afternoon. The AC s are not working and the fans are whirring with insipid ineffectualness. It is hot , humid and claustrophobic. Just want a gust of wind to break through the glass panes.

 

I wish I could have a sudden gust of wind

One that can dispel this claustrophobia

The sweltering heat is too much

The wind would pummel the humidity away

Just blow off the gloom and dreariness

The fans are revolving ineffectually

Failing to cut through the stale stillness

They cannot stir the air

Nor even create a gentle breeze

Nothing short of a gust of wind will do

Roaring and whistling its way in!

Reviews

[Carole]

This piece makes me think of all of the years my family lived in the southern United States and the horrid humidity in both Charleston, South Carolina and Jacksonville, Florida. I can only imagine the humidity in India! How do you do it?

I wish I could have a sudden gust of wind

One that can dispel this claustrophobia

The sweltering heat is too much

The wind would pummel the humidity away

Great visuals! :-)

[Natalie C]

Hey very vivid and great imagery. Loved the playfulness of this piece, just seemed to pull you readers in and wonderfully surprising them with your very clever word choices.
Specially loved the claustrophobic part, great way of describing the humidity

Great work!

[Floating on the feather..]

This reminds me of the old old days...when during the storms all the wires stretched to the electric poles had been torn out and there wasn't any power for two long days....for those days we would just sit with the hand-fans, with water sprinkled on them so it would give some cool air when fanned and would fan it as long as the hands would go numb and we would fall asleep........and the fun part was we never studied during the crisis. The situations had been difficult but its always the way u live through it....so it wasn't all that bad...cos we enjoyed specially when the leaves signaled the approaching gust of air.

Great write. Makes me go back in those days.

[Solst Rapture]

This was an exhilarating and exciting poem. The tension was everywhere, ensured by the clever use of language - dispel, pummel - gloom - ineffectually. After reading it, I wanted to go and sit in the garden and practice what you prescribe.

Very fun, but with a serious struggle not far out of mind.

Solst.

[Phil Sanders]

Charming writing .. lovely images....

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India is like Australia in the summer, by the sound of things. Not a breath of fresh air until evening presents itself and gives some relief.
Glory be what a horrid heat. Well at least you didn't have to work...should have gone home!
Your pictures have almost thrown you off your page Raj...LOL They are beautiful though xx
Helen :-)

[Robert Luna]

I love the flow and pace of this piece. I can relate to you also living in Texas the summer heat could nearly kill you with out a/c. I don't know how people in the old days made it. LOL


Well Done

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Beautiful write..Great sense of visualization and awesome imagery...Also I'm very much impressed with your power of language...
I actually felt the situation....Really Amazing write! :)

[None]

I can feel your discomfort, which is very well worded and displayed here! They should have been fanning everyone while they worked--or let them go home or take a break. It's almost nauseating to be in that state. Especially when you wear certain clothes to work. It's not like you can peel things off like at home! If I lived closer, you could have called me and I would have brought you something...not a gust of wind.. but some help! Some lemonade or Iced Tea and ice cubes. haha.
A weary story is well told within your words and you were able to bring the reader into each emotion and the distress of the situation. Great writing!

Great choice of words, form, and rhythm. Well painted imagery as well.

I too, am looking for that gust of wind in the middle of this summer sun. Being indoor does not really seem to help.

A great piece