Everything

Can I be good enough?

I am here for you

I will be whatever you need me to be

As much as I can be

But will I be enough?

Will I be everything you need,

Everything you deserve?

When I can not even be who I need?

Who am I to you?

Am I your essence?

your heart?

your smile?

Am I the wind on which you fly

or the ground on which you walk

The way you sleep at night

The reason you wake  

The thing you crave?

Or am I a replacement?

Standing in for the star of the show

A distraction

Relief?

Can I ever echo across your face the way she does

Caress your heart the way her still hands still do?

Can I ever be your reason

Your reason to say I love you

Can I ever be what she was?

Can I ever be enough?

Your hands hold my heart

Your words mold my mind

Your fingers find my face

Everything I am is for you

Every beat of my heart

Every thought of my mind

You are my everything

She was your everything

Can I be everything you need?

Author's Note

Wrote this on the spot, I needed to get it out. But I think that"s what most of my writing is. So do your worst :)

Reviews

[The 13th Eros]

Your heart pleads and whispers for understanding, for a way to know your worth.. your place in his life. Such a grey mist seems to cloud your eyes. And my wish in all of this is for you to know that your life and love is a priceless treasure. Let no man or woman underestimate the depth of your value, precious one. xo

[PossiblyAlice]

Thank you. That means a great deal to me

[The 13th Eros]

You're just getting your wings, but I already see you flying. :)

[Mirror]

lol.... I spotted that this work was a spontaneous one. it happens to me too once am affected by a circumstance. that what makes us writers.

the work shows a desire to know what is in the other person's mind while you offer everything in the process. you are not to sure of the outcome, in-confidence. yet you are willing to risk everything, determination. this two elements is in every girl. well done.

[Aarontastic]

Pretty solid poem that gives voice to those feelings that many of us have (even guys) when we ostensibly get to be with someone we love who is just getting out of another relationship - it's impossible not to be able to compare yourself to the outgoing person.

It's interesting how so many of the lines are in the form of questions, like an apostrophe directed at the boyfriend. The poem is mostly simple and straightforward and lacks a lot of imagery and pretty phrasing, but there these two lines really stood out for me:

"Can I ever echo across your face the way she does
Caress your heart the way her still hands still do?

Nice (: pithy and pretty at the same time.

[Akshat♥]

Deep thoughts...amazing write up!!
keep me thinking :)
Sometimes we expect so much from people that we get only hurt...
So be simple ..live with a positive frame of mind:)
Lovely poem..keep writing!!

[Silhouette]

I can totally relate to this write...I tried being everything my ex wanted me to be, thinking he loved me for all I've done, then he let one little thing destroy what we had, so I had to end it because he changed completely =/ Anyways, great write, I enjoyed it =)

[PossiblyAlice]

Thats happened to me too, not what this write is about, but I can empathize. It stinks. This one is about how my current boyfriend's last girlfriend died and I can never replace her/

[Silhouette]

Oh, I'm sorry to hear that =( I agree, it totally bites…

[Weasley]

Gorgeous. love it. OMG love it.

[PossiblyAlice]

thank you

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

So sad...sometimes it is really happens some "alternatives," but not taken seriously. That's what life is we can't teach our heart. Great poem with great emotion.

[PossiblyAlice]

Thak you :)

[trainwreck]

You did a great job of expressing the emotion. It really grabbed me because I have felt this before, and you expressed it so eloquently. Beautiful piece!

[PossiblyAlice]

Thank you, I'm glad you could relate

[easybreezy]

This is very moving. I'm sure everyone has felt this way at some point in their life. I know I have!

[PossiblyAlice]

Thank you, I definitely feel that way