Who are you?

Who are you?

A Story by Rassoul
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A message to a strange person who meant everything for me.

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Last night we were talking and I couldn't recognize your voice, you sounded really weird like I was talking to someone else. Your words are not the same anymore, it feels like you're hiding something, something that will destroy me but you cannot say it.

Who are you? you're not the person I fell in love with. I thought we're going through an ordeal but we're not, you changed and I'm waiting for that day when you won't be here anymore; it would be such a lamentable thing.

We've been through so many months of struggle and suffering but not both of us, I was the only one suffering. 

I guess I will wait for that day when we're wandering the streets aimlessly and we meet by chance, I will ask you the same question. Who are you?

-Rassoul

© 2017 Rassoul



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This is very brilliantly conceived & written. I was transfixed thru the whole thing as I read & imagery was flitting thru my brain, reminding me of the various times in life when this situation was upon me. The hardest thing in life is when two people in love grow in different directions & it happens pretty often unfortunately. You've painted one such scene here that helped us feel how it really feels. The thing I like the very best of all about your observations is the way you are not injecting any blame, but simple describing the truth of how it feels.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words and for your review, I really appreciate it!



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Time do change people and it's really pathetic. Sometimes it's even worse. You depicted it so well in your words. Loved it. :P

Posted 2 Months Ago


This is amazing.
The conclusion has an amazing impact on the reader.
I love the emotion flowing in this and the disappointment and heart break
Amazing

Posted 6 Months Ago


This is very beautiful. It sparks many theories. I could fill out my whole diary with theories, trying to decode the message like an infinite puzzle. It reminds me of how time changes. People turn away from what they once was, into something better or worse. Yet we do not remember who they were before, but they can only dream of what they can become.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words, Trinity!
Stunning imagery and pathos. I can feel you through this piece. My only problem here is that I spotted a few spelling and grammar errors (the 'you're' in the second sentence of the second paragraph should be capitalized; lamentable is mispelled; the period after question in the last sentence should be a colon instead). Not a big deal, but in such a great piece they stand out. A little editing and your writing will shine that much more. Keep it up!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Sorry for the mistakes, maybe I mispelled it because I wrote it fastly. Won't happen again.
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Margaret M.

6 Months Ago

You're welcome! I do that myself all the time, so don't be embarrassed. Best of luck!
This is very brilliantly conceived & written. I was transfixed thru the whole thing as I read & imagery was flitting thru my brain, reminding me of the various times in life when this situation was upon me. The hardest thing in life is when two people in love grow in different directions & it happens pretty often unfortunately. You've painted one such scene here that helped us feel how it really feels. The thing I like the very best of all about your observations is the way you are not injecting any blame, but simple describing the truth of how it feels.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words and for your review, I really appreciate it!
I could really relate to this. The emotion behind the words is very powerful. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much, glad you liked it.
I really love the emotion behind your words, keep up the good job!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Katerina. You're such a great writer.
I've always been the same, maybe you just saw me differently, but i've always been a wooden chair

Posted 6 Months Ago


Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Wooden Chair, thank you so much for your feedback.
WoodenChair

6 Months Ago

You're very welcome, so glad you enjoyed it
Very nice story of pain and betrayal, Your writings always come through nicely

Posted 6 Months Ago


Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Aquestra!
These words are filled with strong feelings and emotions, I really liked the description in your words, so honest and so real.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Rassoul

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words, I appreciate your review!
Joey Nizz

6 Months Ago

Your welcome :)

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Added on May 23, 2017
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