I Was There

Inspiration from the quote 'Lean into it. it means the outcome doesn't matter, what matters is you were there for it.'

I was there,

With strangers, patiently waiting

A sextet if you will

Darkness binds us

We take a knee

Candlelight ceremony

A new beginning

I was there

 Blissful ignorance

 Strangers strung together

         By the secrets they share

         A task set before us

         Forward Looking

         We were(n’t) prepared

I was there

         The beginning of our quest

         Strangers, confident and determined

         A long road

         We don our Obsidian Armor

         And march against the black

         We were(n’t) prepared

I was there

         Strangers, stood forlorn

         Against our dark foe, Sir

         We stood our ground

         Held together, yet,

         Flanked by our own ignorance

         We weren’t prepared

I was there

         Despair, Strangers

         Marching under a starless night

         Crawling through the grime

         Against an unrelenting force

         Our Line is broken

         We weren’t prepared

I was there

         A fire rekindled

         We find each other, friends

         Our cry heard for miles

         With force equal yet opposite

         A standstill,

         We were prepared

I was there

         Friends, descending into Hell

         Weary, yet determined to persevere

         We carry each other

         Knocking Down their defense

         A light, hope

         We were prepared

I was there

         The (un)lucky day

         Friends, from dusk till dawn

         With noxious concoctions

         We are inundated

         Betrayal, our Master turns

         We were(n’t) prepared

I was there

Friends, arm in arm

Marching through the cold

Our Obsidian Armor, lost

Souls, ragged yet unbroken

Future, muddled

We were(n't) prepared

I was there

         Friends, confident and determined

         Friends, stood united

         A bridge over troubled water

         Our final foe

         A final push

         We were prepared

I was there

         We stand triumphant

         Joyful cheers

         Brothers in arms

         Till the day we die

         We are one

         We are prepared

I am there

         

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is always welcome =) hope you enjoyed it! A Journey from strangers to more than friends. Every line, every word, every capital, every space, every punctuation has meaning to me and it was good to just release. This is referring to something that happened to me over this past semester. Something I am extremely proud of to have made through.

Reviews

[Alrick]

Wonderfully written, and i love the repetition of "i was there." i love the meaning behind it and how it goes from the past to the present at "i am there" as the ending, telling a great story of what has already happened. An interestingly hidden meaning type poem where the reader is left wondering what really happened that caused you to write this. In all though: love at first read. :)

[The_Jabberwock]

Well done, and well said. I see the rigidity that Kevin was talking about, but this poem still flows pretty well, despite that. I'll find you later, you should explain your reasoning for how you wrote the poem to me. That's always interesting to hear

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Awesome job
100/100

[Kitty Robinson]

i was emotionally driven to the 7th stanza. That was my fav. of all. Don't know why but it was

[Doxophobia]

"I was there

Friends, descending into Hell

Weary, yet determined to persevere

We carry each other

Knocking Down their defense

A light, hope

We were prepared"
This was my absolute favorite in the poem. truly beautiful piece. Haunting, and so severe, it makes you shiver, almost. I love how the sensory images and harsh stanzas really make you feel like you are there. You are not prepared. I loved it.

[AK]

Wow! Nice poem! It's long and flows really well:)) keep writing!

[Falling Leaf.]

Writing a long poem like this is a challenge for me, since I tend to get off track. That's why finding a longer piece with a strong, sure storyline is such a treat for me! Thank you for sharing!

Kindest regards and best of luck,
Savannah

[kayla]

This is well-written and emotion driven(: I ejoyed.

[koty bell]

very creative i liked this

[Obsidian Wave]

I can't even begin to describe how amazing this poem is. There were several parts where I had to pause and reread just to take it all in. What you said about every word line capital, etc. being chosen specifically shows. This is incredible!