Friend Or Foe

When I was young, I was really stupid and I didn't like anyone.

 

If You're Really My Friend

 

Throughout Toward The End

 

Leave Me Alone And Go Pass By

 

Unless There's A Battle Cry

 

Once You've Become My Foe

 

You're Stepping On My Toes

 

Try Not To Get Too Tough

 

I, Too, Can Be Real Rough

 

Let's Get Ready To Rumble

 

Even When I'm Left In Crumble

 

I'll Get To Throw The Best Punch

 

A Knuckle Sandwich For Your Lunch

 

No Need For The Act On Rampage

 

Not Even The Value Of The Rage

 

As Long As The Fight's Fair

 

Afterward, We'll Be Square

 

At The End Of The Fight

 

I Got A Cigarette To Light

 

Author's Note

Yeah, I was one angry bastard who wouldn't take any bullshits.

Reviews

[Sarah]

This was a cute poem that captures the anger that children can feel towards others, and how you really only want your friends to leave you alone. XD I liked the line "I'll Get To Throw The Best Punch / A Knuckle Sandwich For Your Lunch" Very nice. (: My only issue was that a bit of the rhyme seemed forced and sounded awkward. =/ I guess that can work if you're writing it from a child's perspective, but it was a little distracting for me. Either way, good job with this! =)

[Lexie James]

I really likes this poem. Playful aswell as angry. I've felt like that before. Thank you.
Lexie

[Anna Writes]

I'll Get To Throw The Best Punch
A Knuckle Sandwich For Your Lunch

[Lia]

I love it!! So deep and serious!!!!!! Great write Joey!!!!! x

[Stacy]

I got a kick out this one hun. I mean some times we have our points where we need to put our foot down and it looks like you did within these words.

[Kevin Andros]

If You're Really My Friend

Throughout Toward The End

Leave Me Alone And Go Pass By

Unless There's A Battle Cry


The opening lines are good enough. It's funny how you speek that if you are a friend, then leave me alone. Nice work. And if you are an enemy, then you step on my toes. Good write. ~KA~

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Cool! If I had the strength to match my own impatience and anger, I'd totally be able to relate to this poem. Unfortunately, the ticking time-bomb in the depths of my heart has been forced into being obsolete. :P

I really admire that warning tone in this poem. It sounds highly convincing, which makes me safe to assume that many of the emotions presented in the poem are valid. Anger and isolation are usually the feelings that teenagers, especially me, display towards others. It sucks, but it's something that us teens have to deal with until we get older. I personally favor the first four verses. That's exactly how many of my friends act towards each other... especially me because I'm the girl of the group. :P

I think this poem is an excellent source that an adolescent could read; it would serve as a reflection of who we really are and possibly motivate us for change. You know, to be more tolerant or social. Great job with this! It was really cool.

Ironically Yours. Blade and Blood

[Lexy]

Some of the lines I liked, and others I really didn't. I think it's because of the way you wanted to rhyme.

[darkgurl]

I love this write, this is just plain awesome you have talent I like the way you write. "Let's Get Ready To Rumble Even When I'm Left In Crumble I'll Get To Throw The Best Punch A Knuckle Sandwich For Your Lunch" I really like these lines here, Sounds like a teenage boy, well written.

[Gema]

I'm unsure of what to make of it it's bizare! Don't get me wrong i like it but there's something about it you know thats diffrent! Well written!