Et Iterum? (And Again?)

A boy tries to help a girl and the cycle begins.

Everything was so bright and numb, it was beautiful. She was beautiful. His ears rung in pain, he was laying flat on his back. Smoke hung in the air around him. He clutched his chest, red blood bubbled through his fingers. He saw her. Shaking, crying, he tried to stand up, and after a few attempts he succeeded. He walked to her and hugged her. For a brief moment there was peace. Then there was a bright flash and more pain. He broke the hug and looked at her between them more smoke billowed up. He grimaced. "Et Iterum?"

He fell again. And again more blood, and again more tears.

Author's Note

This isn't terribly long, its a feeling, its meant to convey a feeling and make the reader, you, feel the pain and desperation of the boy, and the confusion of the girl. I purposefully did not name either of them, they are interchangeable.

Reviews

[Archia]

I liked the point of the feeling you were conveying and I think you did a good job in getting it across.
I must admit I don't understand the point of the 'Et Iterum'. It not being in english doesn't seem to serve any purpose other than making it seem a bit fancier which it doesn't need to do. Apart from that I enjoyed everything else and for such a short work you definitely did well to get so much feeling across.

[RevengeRoman]

I tried (in vain) to translate it in the last line and leave the feeling of what it meant, it means "And Again?" Kinda like Julius Caesar when he was killed in the Senate House, "Et tu Brute?" Thank you so much for your review it's deeply appreciated! - RR