Wow! At first I thought this might be autobiographical. I feel like the last sonnet then clarified that you were writing of all mothers who have sons struggling with the human condition. Then your notes really clarify the subject. And what a deep subject to write about. If only a mother could have the same power of a peer.
Thought there might be a Petrarchan Sonnet in this. I've written a few Garland and Crown of Cinquain, but this Crown of sonnets is new to me. I'm interested. I just wrote two more 'Rock' sonnets to make a trio of them. Four more and I have a Crown. Thanks.
For taking your time to spend reading and commenting on this rat.. read moreThank you, Bill 🙏
For taking your time to spend reading and commenting on this rather mammoth composition.
It is an autographical piece, taken from the atmosphere, occurrences, neighborhood/people, lifestyle, facts, and emotion of my own upbringing: Note the list of those who've made it out of Houston's ghettoes.
In considering your own Crown of Sonnets, pay particular attention to the Crown of Sonnets details after Author's Comments.
One day to come, I'll look forward to your Crown of Sonnets.
A lovely weekend to you, My Astute Protégé! ⁓ Richard🖌
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Wow! At first I thought this might be autobiographical. I feel like the last sonnet then clarified that you were writing of all mothers who have sons struggling with the human condition. Then your notes really clarify the subject. And what a deep subject to write about. If only a mother could have the same power of a peer.
Thought there might be a Petrarchan Sonnet in this. I've written a few Garland and Crown of Cinquain, but this Crown of sonnets is new to me. I'm interested. I just wrote two more 'Rock' sonnets to make a trio of them. Four more and I have a Crown. Thanks.
For taking your time to spend reading and commenting on this rat.. read moreThank you, Bill 🙏
For taking your time to spend reading and commenting on this rather mammoth composition.
It is an autographical piece, taken from the atmosphere, occurrences, neighborhood/people, lifestyle, facts, and emotion of my own upbringing: Note the list of those who've made it out of Houston's ghettoes.
In considering your own Crown of Sonnets, pay particular attention to the Crown of Sonnets details after Author's Comments.
One day to come, I'll look forward to your Crown of Sonnets.
A lovely weekend to you, My Astute Protégé! ⁓ Richard🖌
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'Streets of Houstin'
Richard,
This was very revealing of how life can be and is for many. I can appreciate how you gave a voice to these many. It is meaningful as you begin on a personal note in the life of one mama and her experience. This is the beginning of the brave abandoned mamas and speaks to what it is like to remember being poor. I really appreciated your story style with a lilting flow using last line to first line of following stanza. It does help keep the reader connected. It was so beautiful. Finally this is a story saying look around and see others and not only ourselves.
Bless you.
Kathy
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
Thank you most gratefully, Dear Kathy🌱
There's always a smile on my face that drif.. read moreThank you most gratefully, Dear Kathy🌱
There's always a smile on my face that drifts into my heart each time I see you've read one of my poems, because there's no doubt you're going to not only grasp the true essence in meaning of my words, but the depths my emotions that took my pen to task when writing them.
This is a rather lengthy work, but that hasn't ever seemed to discourage you in the least … so far.
My warmest gratitude to you, Lady-Poet, for being such a lovely friend these years long … a bushel basket of hugs for thee! ⁓ Richard 🍃
2 Years Ago
Richard
this was a beauty to read because life is not in material things but in others and s.. read moreRichard
this was a beauty to read because life is not in material things but in others and simplicity. So many desires people have can and do become stumbling blocks and chains constricting.
Keep it up you are an inspiration.
Kathy
How very thought provoking and reminds me of a life which feels a 100 years ago! Life teaches us many lessons and it's sad that some do not escape, or indeed survive. I could rattle on! But, I enjoyed reading this (several times). I felt the warmth and comfort of a mother's love for her baby, I felt the learning of a tough environment and I felt the determination to aspire and the sadness for those who don't.
Thank you, Richard, for this intimate and enlightening piece 💋
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Well, my goodness, Sessy! 🌺
What a wonderful surprise that you not only found this monster.. read moreWell, my goodness, Sessy! 🌺
What a wonderful surprise that you not only found this monster of a poem, but that you actually read and reviewed it for me … you are, indeed, a truly thoughtful poetess of quality and generosity, and you read it "several times". I'm gobsmacked!!!
How very correct you are; it is another world away, a very sad, abusive place to grow-up IN and get away FROM … and, as you feel, sooo long ago.
From your meaningly shared words, I am assured you've understood the core essence of this mini-bio in poetic expression.
Thank you, Sessy, from my heart … warmest, most grateful hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃
How could I not read this and several times? I Identify with what you're saying. It resonated and m.. read moreHow could I not read this and several times? I Identify with what you're saying. It resonated and made me think of my own growing up experiences. That's what I mesnt by a life 100 years ago. Battle scars, survival and strength.
5 Years Ago
Finally,
You got through to me … I understand. : )
5 Years Ago
More than anything, I appreciated the complexity. My identification with where this came from was se.. read moreMore than anything, I appreciated the complexity. My identification with where this came from was secondary. I might not have conveyed that.
first off...what an admirable challenge you gave yourself .. second .. the story and theme is well told, easy to follow and i love the redemptive quality that goals and perseverance yield as in this set of sonnets .. pics add dimension and personal touch .. are you in the tip pic?? are those your dogs and i assume your home? .. is that someone sitting on the back porch???
the last line/first line works like a pantoum of sorts ..i think it does a great job of strengthening the connections .. never heard of a Crown of Sonnets ;} so thank you for that sir! i must be honest tho...i will not try more than one sonnet at a time... if that ... ties me noodle up in nerve bundles just thinking of it :)))))))))))))))
E.
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Thank you immensely, Gene 😊
I am surprised, but pleasantly so, you accepted my invitation .. read moreThank you immensely, Gene 😊
I am surprised, but pleasantly so, you accepted my invitation to read and review this mammoth piece. I've tried to steer several here when asking about my youth and upbringing, each of whom declined by simply never showing-up.
Definitely, this form is a true challenge, one of which I've written only three in my entire poetical career … It's not my favorite to take-on.
Anytime you'd like to learn the English Sonnet, just say the word; I'd love to teach it to you, My Friend. With your skill and flexibility, I know you'd master it in no time. : )
Those kids are long after my time, Gene, they have contemporary tennis shoes, good clothes, and a skateboard, but are a good example of today's ghetto kids. Though, the house is not mine, it is in my neighborhood, and a bit nicer. The dogs always chased bikes and would bite. The porch is in front, and I can't tell if that's someone or something on it.
I really appreciate you sharing my poem story … thank you ever-so gratefully.
Many blessings, Dear Poet! ⁓ Richard 🍃
i think i have an English Sonnet somewhere here at the Cafe' ...found it: http://www.writerscafe.org.. read morei think i have an English Sonnet somewhere here at the Cafe' ...found it: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/rIGt2mAk3/2073533/?&p=2
i will absolutely take you up on the help if ever i get some crazy thought to do another .... i know i have an Italian Sonnet here as well ...
5 Years Ago
Ahhh!
So, you, indeed, have, and an encouraging cowrite effort it is … quite the accomplish.. read moreAhhh!
So, you, indeed, have, and an encouraging cowrite effort it is … quite the accomplishment.
A message is on its way, My Friend … thank you so much for sharing. : )
Oh. My. Gosh. This was Ambitious with a capital A!
Writing just ONE sonnet is grueling for me; this is really very impressive. Amazing!
Only three reviews? That's a shame. This is a powerful story of hard life for children and adolescents in the ghetto, and the strong will and determination required to climb out of it, as told by someone who has done so. Your encouraging advice to these kids was a positive way to complete this Crown. I hope they get to read it.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Dear Karen,
Thanks so very warmly and appreciatively for taking this one on, and most certain.. read moreDear Karen,
Thanks so very warmly and appreciatively for taking this one on, and most certainly for grasping the value and essence that prompted me to compose it.
You've a lovely, understanding, pure heart of gold ✨ bless you ever-so warmly and sincerely! ⁓ Richard
You have certainly done the crown of sonnets justice, in the crafting of your words & message. To me, this is clearly stated & flowing logically thru each selected theme within a theme. I hesitate to point out any weaknesses, becuz the mere effort of fitting your message into this exactly & demanding form is an accomplishment few poets would even attempt. So you deserve high accolades for this amazing feat. Thanks for directing my attention here, so I could admire your amazing poetic abilities.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Hi, Lovely Margie! : )
I am elated you've taken the time and effort to read (and review) thi.. read moreHi, Lovely Margie! : )
I am elated you've taken the time and effort to read (and review) this virtual journey of a poem; I'm pleasantly surprised, too … thank you most gratefully, M'Lady.
Once upon a time, from the dozen (or, so) poetry sites I've served on, there was but one wonderful genuine teaching site among them. On this site one there was a list containing 175 poetic forms, and one of the requirements to retain a free membership was to correctly compose at least one poem in each form within a year; failing that, one would be required to buy a membership if they wished to remain a member. The Crown Of Sonnets was one of those forms that seemed to best fit the idea of my mini-auto bio, and this was my example of the form. I actually composed two more poems in this form, and that was IT for me … LOL!
I am truly grateful for your accolades, Margie, and very happy you actually cared enough to read about me. That you've expressed admiration for my poetic abilities is wonderfully gratifyingly sweet of you, too, but my motive in steering you to this one is so you'd know the truth about my upbringing, to know me a bit better.
Your review is wonderful, Margie
Thank you sincerely and gratefully for your always appreciated attention … big hugs to you! ⁓ Richard
very well written sir,..the message of the poen.is straight forward
but in the secind stanza,you said,to walkh through fear and fear no one,..from my little knowlegdw of the ghetto,fear is out of the dictionary.. or maybe i dont get the clear mesaage there.
Goodness, Usman!
I must has fallen asleep to miss your compliment and truly attentive comment.. read moreGoodness, Usman!
I must has fallen asleep to miss your compliment and truly attentive commentary to this marathon piece of poetry, My Friend … I humbly apologize for taking so long to respond.
In addressing that "fear" verse: The intent was to emphasize that, though, there was more than ample reason for fear, to survive in that environment, one must conquer/overcome their fear and walk bravely through it all.
Usman, you are most welcome, and it is I who thank you … ever-so humbly! ⁓ Richard
7 Years Ago
thank you sir..
can you help review some of my poems.
thanks
7 Years Ago
Of course, Usman,
That is part of my plan today … thank you for asking, My Friend! ⁓ Rich.. read moreOf course, Usman,
That is part of my plan today … thank you for asking, My Friend! ⁓ Richard
I care enough about your poem to come back and read it again.. the form is more than fine.. it's the tale within it i can't dash through at the moment.
Tis sad but full to the brim of lessons learned; the added notes at the end prove your point about having or rather finding, the strength to get through and survive. So many do.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Em,
What can I say?
You so deeply honor me and elate my senses by your caring attentio.. read moreEm,
What can I say?
You so deeply honor me and elate my senses by your caring attention, that I'm surprised to near silence — difficult as that may be to believe. : )
For awhile, the site quit notifying me of reviews, comments, and messages. It would appear your review was conducted during that period, and I am truly sorry to have not read and commented on your review until now, M'Dear … please, forgive* 🙄
You have more than blessed me with your praise and understanding.
I hug your wonderfully beautiful heart with deepest appreciation … thank you for taking this one on, Dear Em, and for leaving your special touch! ⁓ Richard