Roots

Roots

A Poem by Rose Diamond
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I sometimes forget how innocent I used to be, and how I was such a happy child, so I've decided to try and be the way I used to be. I've decided to remember and be honest to my roots. Enjoy :)

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I once was a child
Innocent and sweet
I believed in blue skies
And the sun shined for me
I smiled at strangers
And blew kisses to boys
I always made new friends
And always shared my toys

I once was a child
So young and naive
I'd do as I was told
I thought I was free
I believed in the future
Thought a hug made things right
I thought I was pretty
I thought I was bright

Now I am older
And I've drank the tea of truth
I understand my future
Much better than in my youth
The sun won't shine forever
They skies all fade to grey
Strangers aren't to be trusted
And friends get in the way

Freedom is a joke to me
Much long past it's prime
Society has told me
That everything's a crime
Unless you're rich or powerful
You're nothing more than grime

I once was a child
Sometimes I miss those days
When I couldn't yet spell "politics"
And all I'd do was play
I miss the complete and utter trust
I'd put in everyone for miles
But most of all I truly miss
The ability to smile

I know the child from years ago
Still dwindles in my heart
I want to give her another chance
And now's the time to start
So even if the world around me
Hollars, shouts, and shoots,
I'll remember the girl I used to be
And stay honest to my roots

© 2014 Rose Diamond



Author's Note

Rose Diamond
I'm worried a bit about the flow, so any suggestions would be awesome! :)

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The flow does get a bit wordy here and there. If you read it aloud to yourself, and you'll be able to hear just where. All it would take it simply to take out a syllable or two from certain lines and the musicality would flow more smoothly. If you can't find them on your own while reading it aloud, I would pinpoint exactly where. (There is nothing wrong with the bridge stanza though....that I can see has a rhythm/musicality that differs from the other stanzas, and it reads beautifully).

Apart from that, this is a great poem with a powerful message that the world should heed. Well done!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Great piece of work! It makes me miss myself lol

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose Diamond

3 Years Ago

Haha thank you very much! :)
wow amazing poem its so relate-able. i love a lot of the lines they make me feel at home like i can read this poem and think to myself. I am so glad i have my roots

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose Diamond

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much! I'm glad you could relate! :)
I have fallen in love with this poem *~* Keep up the good work!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose Diamond

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much! Your words are very appreciated! :D
GhoulOfGore

3 Years Ago

Anytime :D
I think its absolutely wonderful and the flow was nice

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose Diamond

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much! :)
The flow is great. and the poem is the beatiful facts aboilut life in general.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose Diamond

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much! :)
shaun36

3 Years Ago

Your welcome. great poem too.

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Rose Diamond
Rose Diamond

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(Formerly Rosie-Chan) Hi there! My name is Rose, I'm 17, I love theatre, music, and literature, and I am a poet! I am literally the most inconsistent poet ever, but I'm ok I guess. more..

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