HOME TORTURE

HOME TORTURE

 

 

Her enchanting eyes,

Her melody voice;

Her hair's movement in the air-

And dear full swing of hand-

To make a new sketch in the wind;

 

Her play, for catching the butterflies

Her tone in the sorrow voice;

Quiver tweets in happiness

 Always new verse and call

How are you happy in all?

 

But that all was before us

She wouldn't want to go home, only rush

She was tortured by own

They want her to stay home tide

And don’t be stronger for get your right.

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

She might not have to stay home forever, or is it because she left home that she gets tortured? The first two verses are great. The last verse is a bit vague; I think there may be some grammatical mistakes. But, actually when I read it out aloud it sounded very good. Well penned.

[Penny]

A perfect depiction of someone who hides pain, can be made into a story. Nicely penned.

[MsJewel]

You have created some beautiful images for the reader to enjoy. Lovely my friend.

:) Julie

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A piece that leaps of the screen and stains the heart, well done, good read.

[star73]

very enjoyabel love reading your poem

[Jamil Isimbabi]

good piece saddam.. keep it up

[SANDEEP SHETTY]

Its a heartful poem Ssad.....i liked it...
Some people give off radiance to surroundings but cant enjoy it themselves...

[FlamingPhoenix]

Pretty story and imagery in this write. I enjoyed!

[Mary Steffen]

Great write!
It kept me very at the edge of my seat. Very creative the writing well done.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Amazing write, Ssadd. Loved it.

Kaze~ :-D