The Smoke of my Fire

The Smoke of my Fire

A Poem by Fire_Of_Rome
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hmm... the idea of how smoke lives off a dying fire

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Why do you suffocate me?
When your heart departs my fire, 
You live like smoke off my fading embers,
As Apollo and his lyre,

You sing your dark melody,
As each log still chars to pyre,
Like the smoke rises from sullen ashes,
My death is your own desire,

You parasite, you Judas,
When I call you out, you liar,
You escape like smoke of my fallen breath,
Singing your charms of the choir,






© 2019 Fire_Of_Rome



Author's Note

Fire_Of_Rome
I like the idea of smoke living off a dying fire. Seems kinda cool :P

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I like the idea of burning everything with fire. it has mystery and emotion all in one swoop. nicely done.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

2 Months Ago

Thank you :) I use to be quite the pyromaniac as a child to be honest ;)
Absolutely cool! Such a unique direction and helpful insite grieving a breakup.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

2 Months Ago

Thank you Allen, I'm pretty much brain dead cuz right now it's 1:30 AM and imma sleep. But I'll revi.. read more
Yes indeed - the 'smokey aftermath' does choke our hearts and creates an apprehension to rekindle a burnt out relationship - Loved your write and really enjoyed the read - ... :-)

Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

2 Months Ago

Thank you phill! That means a lot to me :) smoke does suffocate us in a burnt out relationship and w.. read more
Hold onto a relationship that is over. With someone who was a cheater. Is not good for your heart, mind or soul. Wonderful flow of words and nice use of Apollo and Judas into this write. A beautiful flowing piece Sarah. Great images casted inside my mind.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much dawn. Thst means a lot to me :3
I appreciate you stopping by, and hahaha I .. read more
I liked the allusions to Apollo and Judas it really added substance to the poem. Also I enjoyed the rhyming and over all flow your work.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

Thank you Tony! Glad you appreciate! :D
Tony Mak

2 Months Ago

My pleasure!
This is excellent. It leaves questions and thoughts in the mind of the reader which is something all good poetry should do. The imagery is fantastic too.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

Thank you Craig! I'm glad you like this :)
Living off a dying fire - perhaps because the smoke knows it can't survive without it so it keeps clinging as much till it finally dies. I take it as clingy relationships where one just doesn't know how to let go and being totally dependent on the other.
Interesting last stanza. I like this piece.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

nope! thats not it at all. its about someone who kinda takes amusement in anothers pain even though .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

hmm I can't get that idea around my head...you're welcome, Sarah.
Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

whyyyy? hahahahaah
It reads like venting out anger calmly...poetically!
The thought of smoke living off a dying fire is cool....hot at the same time ;)
I loved the second verse much....gloriously penned!💖


Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

ah, being calmly angry is the best form of anger. Thank you Tahsin for stopping by here :3 and yeah,.. read more
Clinging on for life. That's what I get from your words Sarah, a really good poem by the way. When it's over, it's over. Some people just don't get the message. Hope you are OK dear one?

Chris

Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

I'm fine thank you :P and thank you for that lovely review! i appreciate you stopping by and writing.. read more
When we get burned by another lies venting is the best way to put out the fire,

Very well written.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Fire_Of_Rome

3 Months Ago

Thank you Cowboy! I appreciate that comment of yours :) that's a good tip too :D thanks for stopping.. read more

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Added on February 12, 2019
Last Updated on February 13, 2019
Tags: smoke, fire, dying, betrayal, parasite

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