Spiteful Tree

Spiteful Tree

A Poem by Shane Mohamed
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A tree flowering with pessimism.

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I’ve picked up,

This golden Axe,

And started chopping

Down

This tree of pessimism,

That has haunted

Me for twenty

Long years,

That has turned

My days

Into nights,

And the sweetness,

Into bitterness;

The hue of the

Rainbow,

Into shades of

Gray;

The translucent White,

Into

Tar Black.

You’ve made me

Loathe my own

Homeland,

Or was it

The other way around?

I strike

And blast,

And throttle,

With these

Bare hands

Of mine,

With fury and anger,

With tears down

My tender cheeks,

And as I plunder,

My frail

Back aches.

Naked hands

Of mine blister,

And ooze with

Mournful blood;

Blood that has

Accumulated over

Two long decades,

But victory’s mine.

I shall overcome

This spiteful tree.

I blow the last thrust,

And it fell down,

And as it fell,

I saw the sun glow

Over the horizon.

I licked the sweat

Of my rested

Conscience,

And I’ve never

Tasted

Anything sweeter.

Today, I celebrate my

Well-earned optimism.


© 2015 Shane Mohamed



Author's Note

Shane Mohamed
First time writing a poem in this format and that length. I hope it wasn't too cumbersome for you to read. Opinions and criticisms are welcomed.

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Many symbolic images throughout the poem. The tree- life, golden ax- reminded me of the golden rule, yet a tool of chopping and made of gold -it is pure, it is immensely strong enough to set you free. Rainbow - the symbol of hope with all the colors a promise of a better day, is gray, you need all the colors, beckoning them to come back. Your pain as you are "chopping" a stoic picture of your perseverance and strength. The sun finally greets you with the new light of things being better. Well done Shane!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you Skittles. I did what I could. Very thorough and precise review. You need your own column ;.. read more
I really like this. I like the structure of it a lot. I think it adds a nice , concise nature to the poem . The images are great.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you Kate. Glad you liked it.
A great write to demonstrate the shedding of pessimism. Welcome to club optimist!!!! I enjoyed this very much Shane!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Yay! I'm in. I thought it would do me some good if I changed the way I think. Thank you for the supp.. read more
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2 Years Ago

:) it's in the mail!!!!!!!
Hard to do. But must be done.
"This spiteful tree.
I blow the last thrust,
And it fell down,
And as it fell,"
I liked the reason and the positive ending in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Yes, my mood has always been dark and gloomy. I was told that I need to change it, so I tried. Thank.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome.
To a certain limit - yes, optimism can be beneficial but not to the point where everything is viewed behind rose-colored glasses. A certain healthy amount of skepticism in this world is needed lest we be fooled.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

He's been so skeptic, it drove him backwards. But you're right; one doesn't see life in pink. A real.. read more
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2 Years Ago

The goal is to make sure you never take your eyes off the real world; still, optimism can be the dri.. read more
Rachelle

2 Years Ago

True........
This is the never say die attitude many just don't have. To persevere
and conquer is so fulfilling. Great piece of work and b-blessed!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you James. I appreciate it.
Jamestown

2 Years Ago

Of course, PTL!
No optical illusion when pessimism is based on good faith and strong will to overcome. Patience is the centre in the process. An amazing write...:)......

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you dear friend.
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

You are welcome. Any time...:)....

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Shane Mohamed
Shane Mohamed

Dalton, GA



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Name's Sherif Mohamed, but I tell people to call me Shane, since my name has been mispronounced as "Sheriff" many times. I'm 29. Originally, I'm an artist; I draw and paint, as you can see in my pictu.. more..

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