Caged soul

People say you will never return,

But I have some great memories,

Which have chained you,

Which will never let your soul be free,

You are caged in my heart.

Author's Note

Tell me what do you think? Any mistake? If yes, please let me know and yes thank you for giving your precious time and reading my poem.

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

So relatable. I liked the way you expressed your feelings.

[Shasha]

Oh, thank you, Saher! I am pleased that you liked it!!!

[Najam Us Saher]

I am glad I came across this poem. You are most welcome.

[Ruth]

Superb, memories are an interesting way to link to someone and this is a unique concept written here, wonderfully done :)

[Shasha]

Oh, thank you very much my friend. Pleased to listen that you liked it!!!

[Taz]

This is short but so powerful it says so much is just five lines yet people everywhere have whole conversations at all, I really think it is amazing what came come out of any poem.

[Shasha]

Thank you very much Taz. I am so glad that you liked my poem. Thank you for gifting me with a smile...

[Taz]

You are very welcome.

[Taz]

I am listening to Footloose so... I am kinda happy lol.

[Shasha]

Oh, it's really nice.

[Taz]

Music makes me happy in general :)

[Shasha]

Same here! Music washed away the soul.

[writ rajat]

I STRICTLY LIKE RHYMING WORDS BUT I HAVE NOT FIND IT IN THESE LINES

[Shasha]

Hmm, Maybe...

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Well, it's not important for poems to have rhyming words, and anyways, the poem is beautiful without them. And could you please not type all in block? It's really offensive and irritating. And change your comment, it should be found, not find. Please, keep your hate to yourself and spread love and strictly constructive criticism.

- Vasilees

[writ rajat]

You do your job I do my job I will never appreciate your mind status I think that you had not seen authors note above author want anything what the reviewer think about this poem be appreciator and critisizer both let me tell you that you cannot change the like the world you want

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

I am, actually, doing my job. It is my job to stop people from spreading hate, especially unnecessary hate.
Please, I do not even want you to appreciate my, I quote, "mind status." I think it is you who did not read the Author's Note, she asked you to find mistakes, not insults.
Yes, I cannot "change the world like" I want, but I can try to educate the uneducated, and I'm doing my level best.
I repeat, keep your hate to yourself and spread love.
P.s. - Thanks for stopping typing in block.
Vasilees

[writ rajat]

Let me spread love ,
From the Earth's core to sky above ,
I want every one to be loveable ,,
Make love an asset which is moveable .
Vasilees is the love distributor,
We should make her our tutor

[writ rajat]

Don't be greedy behind love

[Izzy Briles]

love the idea of you admitting your own authority in the situation! its beautiful, and a little sinister :)

[Shasha]

Thank you very much Izzy Bridles for reading and reviewing my writing...

[Izzy Briles]

Absolutely! keep doing what you're doing!

[Shasha]

Oh thank you...

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

It's pretty sad. Well written, but the idea it conveys is pretty sad. I mean, keep all the memories you want, they're important, but learn to move on. If you keep mourning over a person, they won't ever truly be set free, which means they'll be caged to this land and never be able to move on. Move on, Shasha. Write something happy. It'll be refreshing for you too.
Love,
Vasilees.

[Shasha]

I got your point. I'll try. Thanks for your review.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

That's my job, ain't it, sis?

[Shasha]

Yup! It is.