Freedom

Show me Something I've never seen

Take me where I've never been

To Lose these chains and fly

Leave these walls and kiss the sky 

Through great remorse be brand new

Which is a dream and which is true 

Now, my future is so violently torn 

From the life that I was born 

Am i a creature to be free 

Or trapped at birth by Destiny 

Conditioning leads me to the latter 

But Without freedom ..... Nothing else matters

Author's Note

I wrote this in one of my worst moments. This is written on the wall of a prison cell. My dwelling for the first 14 days of my second trip to prison. I had Freedom for 93 days. I will carry this little poem with me always it is a part of me. If your still reading thank you and God Bless

Reviews

[Alao Taiwo]

You are tough and full of hope... do you mind telling me what took you to prison?

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Aloa Taiwo, what took me to prison literally speaking the police. The crimes that I committed to go to prison I was charged with 21 felonies in the end I went to prison for two of them. The first one was Fraudulent Schemes which is running a criminal enterprise. The second was for Felony Theft because of the amount of money, I made millions. I do appreciate your reviews of my writing thank you.

Sheer Terror

[TheUnrulyWriter]

This poem is so incredibly powerful. It hardly matters what position you're in, this one hits you like a brick in the face. Everybody feels like they are trapped at some point in their life. Be you in prison, a hospital, or simply at home living the life you planned out for yourself, there are certain rules in this world that keep us all tied back. You captured this idea wonderfully.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

That is very insightful. There are a million ways to be a prisoner of your own device. I had no pen and paper this came through my head just like it reads I was so miserable I kept visualizing the sky. With a small piece of metal from my bunk I put this on the wall. I will never forget these words. Thank you for reading and reviewing. God Bless

Sheer Terror

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

This is a beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing. May God always bless you with freedom :)

[Ana Papaya]

The authors note lends a new perspective to the poem. Good poem.

[Michael S]

Thank you for participating in my contest.
Simple yet elegant write.
Your Author's note helped me to get into deep of this piece.
Enjoy the freedom.
keep writing

[Mr. Lopez]

And oh how the poet grows. Minor hiccups but otherwise really good. It's relatable and well executed and It flows well. Your growing into your own skin.

[Christian Bonoan]

I love this poem! I can relate to this so much!

[B.J]

Change, when life is brand new. Freedom a great experience. Experience freedom and we will never be lost again