What is Life???

What is Life???

First In  a Childhood

Get Up Early In Morning

Go To School Come To Home

Then Go For Tution Then Eatt And Sleep

After Some Years Go To College

Same Routine 

Then Univeristy And Job 

Then After  Education 

Got MArried

Enjoy NEw MArriage  some days

then live up boring routine life

wake  up 

eat breakfast 

go to job 

come back home in evening

Eat  Dinner And Sleep

Same Routine Whole Life 

Grown OId 

Then Die

Boring Life

Is That Life??????????

Reviews

[Ian Craven]

Are you searching for the meaning of life?

[Sikandar Khan]

yeah u can say
i think that people is wasting life by this borng schedule without any aim

[Dust That Drifts Throug..]

I like the idea of this. I've written a short story as an article on this topic.

[Sikandar Khan]

ohhh thats goood

[Sikandar Khan]

ohh so i will like to read send me in message ur short story i am waiting

[Dust That Drifts Through Wind]

okay, I will send you it.

[Dust That Drifts Through Wind]

I sent you two of them.

[Sikandar Khan]

okkk i am waiting

[Dust That Drifts Through Wind]

I sent you it via read request.

[Sikandar Khan]

okkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

[Beautiful Mistake]

I like the theme and the general idea you're trying to play up to. But I like this so much more if I think of it as spoken word rather than a poem. Good job and keep improving

[Sikandar Khan]

ohhh thanks for appreciating
i will write in the form essay because it is my oringinal inner thoughts what i feel peoples living without any aim

[Daniel Weintraub]

I ask myself this every day

[Sikandar Khan]

Yeah Bro i am 18 years old i think about this life i dont want this type of boring life with no. Aim

[Daniel Weintraub]

I'm 22 and just now starting to force myself to try new things and get out of my "comfort" zone. Take your time and think about what it is you want, it can and will change, but once you know, go get it.

[Sikandar Khan]

Yes bos u r deffinetly righy

[The dark story]

I like the theme of the poem here. I am glad you tried to pen your thoughts. Though there are mistakes like grammar and sentence structure. Practice more. Way to go :)

[Sikandar Khan]

Thanks for ur review...

[Not Active]

great poem, minor grammatical issues but other than that i liked it. good job

[Sikandar Khan]

Thanks for appreciating me

[Napoleon has returned]

What. The F**k is this trash?

[Sikandar Khan]

Dont Abuse...
its Not Trash Its Is out of your thinking dont try to undertsand it u cant go away and dont abuse

[Napoleon has returned]

Alright boys

Flank em with her muskets, then charge with dem cavalry, and rule britania

[Riley Justine]

Interesting thoughts here. The circle of life can be beautiful but also terribly repetitive.
I would work on the mechanics of this poem, capitalization, punctuation, sentence structure, and spelling :)
But you portrayed your thoughts and it is a wonderful start. Great insight :)

[Sikandar Khan]

Thanks.....

[Kevin Gerardo]

The theme of your poem is basically fascinating. You attempt to portray what the real life is. But I think you can tell more than that. Besides, try to put attention to the punctuation and grammar. Although they seem negligible, but they also matter.

[Sikandar Khan]

Ok thanks...

[Joshua Ramirez]

Okay, let's try this again.
As an early writer, or poet if you may, I would agree that grammar is one of the pylons that contribute to the significance of a poem. It is possible that it may be overestimated. Yes, let's recognize his inability to properly place his words in a more cohesive manner, but also acknowledge good points. It seems that some people discern reviews to dissuade an adventure into the poetry realm. His first efforts must be appreciated for what it is now, and with experience and feedback, he can do better next time. Thank you.

[Davidgeo]

" It seems that some people discern reviews to dissuade an adventure into the poetry realm." Wow... you are incredibly pretentious (stop trying so hard to sound intelligent, it reveals the oppo). Also, that's not what being critical of obvious incompetence is. Some people shouldn't write for public review, why go soft on them? To feel better about yourself or that person? You're not helping anyone by taking that position, people need to know when they did a s**t job and it doesn't have to be sugar coated. If you want to be an honest reviewer and not some glad hander looking for a ego boost you must realize that no one's "efforts must be appreciated", as you put it. That's akin to "everyone gets a trophy" at the heart of this new BS self esteem movement that has made the millennial generation so weak and reliant on praise and echo chambers and safe spaces and all that nonsense. I don't think you wanted to clarify your point for the author of this poem but rather I think you are desperate to seem wise and well rounded. You had no other reason to leave another review here other than that.

[Joshua Ramirez]

Do you know what constructive criticism is, Particle Man?

[Davidgeo]

I know what I think it is but clearly that is not in line with how you define it. You like to include praise first critique second or not at all. I would use your original review as an example of that but you deleted it and replaced it to accommodate your new "position" on the matter. I know what you're trying to do, good luck with that. It won't end well for you. You should probably just move on and not trip over your own vanity and ego on the way out. But I have a feeling you're about to get real petty.

[Davidgeo]

Try not to sound to pretentious and convoluted though, high school kids never pull that off very well. Try and type your BS conversationally so you don't sound so desperate to impress.

[Joshua Ramirez]

Both of my reviews had my opinions on it. I was only trying to explain my view a bit more. I said grammar is not amazing here, but we can't just limit our view on his grammar alone. I'm not a seasoned writer, but I was expressing my opinions on the matter.

[Davidgeo]

Sure thing skippy.

[Red Rose]

Wow Particle Man. You blame Joshua for having the so called "ego" but I think you are the one with an ego.
Just let it be.. Why are you getting so worked up over other's opinions?
Now I understand why there are wars taking place all over the world. You probably might be coming up with something offending for me.
Just let it be..
Peace out y'all!

[Davidgeo]

Yeah. Probably.