Daily Senryu #1 - Pressure

I can't stand pressure

Why put it on me, not you?

It weighs far too much.

Author's Note

Could you give me some tips about expressing thoughts through haiku?

Reviews

[poetgurl]

I love this,
very well said in a few short words.
awesome

[Einstein Noodle]

i love this..i love how you accent the pressure with the crossed out lines .. i believe this is a senryu however ..haiku are about nature ... senryu about people and usually with a lesson or irony or human foible in closing ... something like that .. if you google them you will get a better idea ... i think you did a great job .. makes me smile and cheer "Yeah" put it on you for a change ..love it!
E.

[SilverInk]

Thanks, and I'll make sure to label this as a senryu.

[Einstein Noodle]

best check it out first...make sure i have it right ...can't tell you how many times i have done just that ;)