Throw It all away for Love

Gospel

You could never understand my pain.

Even if I allowed you to enter my brain.

So for heaven’s sake, I safeguard my heart, so you could never slide inside

unless we create an exodus in bed and partake in tasting the flesh.

And the secrets would most likely push you away, and that'll prove my point, so don't point the blame on me when you say I have brought pain onto you.

The girl I gave away my virginity to is so sacred and placed a curse on me, and it works so perfectly.

I throw it all away for Love.

If I don't throw it all away,

I will become...

It hurts so much to be,

so mote it be.

Author's Note

Tell me why?

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

lots of angles addressed in this poem...i read some of the comments on flow and see how it seems so jagged ... there are many points vying for attention .. and the language switches back and forth form a very colloquial style to more classic ..such as "partake" of the flesh and the exodus in bed .. especially that being the condition held for your protagonist to allow a lover into his heart .. very conflicting ... and "mote" ... for me these change ups really make me think...and read again ... i like your closing two lines especially ...such great pain ... no matter how small it may seem to others is the way i take that ... obviously this poem hooked me ;) it is very different
E.

[sinNsincerity]

Hook, line, and sinker!

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..............

[LKBillips]

Emotionally engaging and forlorn. Without the risk of pain their is no pleasure to be had. Very thought provoking.

[Tatiana]

i love this, out of all honesty you could improve on the flow of the poem, maybe even add more difficult words to make it more interesting or change some words. other than that, It is a great poem and i want to see more.

[conversations with her ..]

i like this a lot..

your flow was on point, literally the entire poem

I'm new on here, so it would be an honour if you could review some of my poems!

[sinNsincerity]

for sure, just send me the read request. And if I really like it, I'll send it to my peeps.

[RxQueen]

Truly a touching piece. So relatable 🖤

[CherryEllie]

I love it. Very relatable. I feel your pain. The one thing I would say, is to improve the flow of the poem. It seems kind of crammed. Try to separate them, try to make it as you're telling a story. Try to slow it down, piece by piece. However, otherwise it's very good. Enjoyed it.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

I can relate to this poem. I have threw away so many things for someone I though I loved but in reality it wasn't meant to be. Great poem :)

[sinNsincerity]

I'm just the opposite. I had someone who was meant to be and threw away love for other things...there's one secret.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Oh. I'm sorry. I've been through many relationships that they either didn't care for me so much or wanted more out of me.

[Benita Paloja]

Wow wow wow!! I felt your words in my soul! I too can relate to this poem. I am a sucker for love just as much as I am a stubborn lover who never wants to let go!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Benita, I'm glad that you could relate and that you had enjoyed it. I once was like you and I'm trying to find my way back...

[Devious13]

pretty good and emotion felt , keep up the work and ways that you express yourself i cant wait to see the upcoming pieces

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Miss Devious, I have missed you. How have you been?

[Devious13]

Why. Thanks for asking love. I'm give jus . Busy. With day to day. Is all. Yourself??

[sinNsincerity]

Well thank you for taking time to step out of your busy life to visit me. I am blessed to be here as always.

[Devious13]

i can understand that all to well at least you see the blessing some take the chance to open both eyes for granted hmmm never good but blessed indeed glad to hear your well

[Suchita]

what does the last line mean? Could thoroughly empathize with your words , that added to the beauty of my experience as usual. Simple and understood, well done