Only in the Dream

Only in the Dream

By: Adam M. Snow

 

Deep in the forest where I lay,

In my Night's-now-my-Day;

The reaper's calling pass my ever dreams.

I dream though I am awake,

Dreaming for my siren sake.

But what of a dream:

A trifle-in our own esteem-

A journey in our visions pass,

A trial in its unobtrusive mass.

I lie here in my infinite wonder,

Lost in tranquility asunder.

Woe, woe unto me a new misgiving;

A dream now worth living.

Reviews

[Shelly Braen]

Wonderful flow and very careful wording. It feels as if I should hold this piece with such tenderness as I would a new born child, as if it is teetering on the edge of delicacy. I am in love with this work. The pain is now something of beauty from your tears to your hands. Still in sleepless nights yet dreams abide.

[Daytonight]

I too love the last line. Keep up the great work.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This is a beautiful sad write, so many dream made only not to be worth living and then bingo you have this perfect one that you can make happen! Excellent read!

[KAREN]

Although it's sad I find the words beautiful as they roll off my lips. I enjoyed reading this poem alot!

[Brytt]

My mind wants to change it. Bad mind, bad! Anyway, in line 4, I want to say "still" before "awake", and at the end I add "that I find" after "A dream". I hate to tell you what to do with your poem! It makes me feel like I'm trying to fit you to a mold.

I'm just a stickler for rythme, so apologies, but I had to get it off my chest.

Still a superb peice!

[Spookers]

"A dream now worth living." So many people wish for the escape from reality. This poem was lovely. I think I am going to enjoy reading your poems.

[Becky C Strukamp]

A dream now worth living.

Love this line...excellent way to conclude this poem.

The entire poem is penned beautifully.

[Demi Rose]

a wonderful dream is this poem.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice, like your awaiting a rendezvous with the nymph you love the most.

[Azariek]

Amazing. It made me feel like I usually do when I wake up from a dream, before the dream fades away. Excellent work :3